Open Poetry #8 |
Lady of the Night |
OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Lady of the Night Smoke, mingled with peroxides convoluted curl, Her lips a filter tipped memory of acts performed, Coiled serpent on one shoulder, Entwined with indelible sentiment, "Bobby 4 ever", Tan skin fading into white, into tan, Once held taught by black leather promises, Following perspirations path, down undulating spine, Ending in violet silks swelling peach, Payment lost in langeries complexity, for an instant, Then deftly gathered, hooked 'tween flesh and fishnet, Rising she, mythical gaudy bird from embers lust, Tracing trail of disgarded garments to the door, I finger crushed linens impression of her form, Last echoes of contracts complete, "Bye hon', thanks....." And then I sleep. Olias [This message has been edited by OLIAS (edited 06-25-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her lips a filter tipped memory of acts performed. ------------------ Tan skin fading into white, into tan, Once held taught by black leather promises, Following persirations path, down undulating spine, Ending in violet silks swelling peach, Payment lost in langeries complexity, for an instant, Then deftly gathered, hooked 'tween flesh and fishnet, Rising she, mythical gaudy bird from embers lust, Tracing trail of disgarded garments to the door, I finger crushed linens impression of her form, ----------------- WOW....amazing imagery here... I feel as if i was there watching... excellent writing, truly take care, jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
What a beautiful poem... you seem to have a great talent here. Keep up your writing! I look forward to reading more from you! "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
J.M and D.E. Thanks for your kind words (I noticed my sp mistake too ), I tried to give some beauty and dignaty to the "oldest profession in the world " Regards Olias |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow, Olias, what a unique take on this subject. Your words are clever and the imagery paints an often "ugly or "controversial" topic as beautiful. It's great to see the world through your eyes. Keep sharing your gems, my friend! I wonder, do you speak from experience, that's okay, your secret's safe with me Take care, Melissa Honeybee [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-25-2000).] |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thanks Melissa your very kind, and all I will say is that I couldnt appreciate the light without first experiencing the dark... Your Friend Olias |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
What fabulous imagery you have brought to this...A fantastic read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful Verse in a most artistic shape, Though I hope the one you were inspired by was not so disproportionate thru the hips...lol Very well thought out. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well written. Enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
WOW...Incredible writing. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I enjoyed the read, you painted the picture well with your words. Thank you. |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Tracie Thanks for posting, my heads swelling Prometheus I'm glad you liked it, sorry about the artistic bit, I'm getting old and cant remember what women look like. Mike thank you glad you enjoyed it. Serenity your very kind my heads swelling more. Gemini Thanks for commenting, I'm not too bad with the words its the feelings I have trouble with. Thanks everyone for making my time with you so enjoyable. Regards Olias |
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