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None can stop it now
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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No rainbow light of morning come, no salmon sky, no thought undone- nothing nothing everything-- rhythm of your sleep I sing and none can stop it now... No welcome cloud, no breeze betray, no sway of palm, no prayers I pray... nothing nothing everything can make it any other way-- none can stop it now. Not the gentle in your eyes nor sadness in the cling of sighs... nothing nothing everything-- beyond us--all is lies-- and none can stop it now... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This feels so powerful and so filled with emotions Serenity. Stunning expressions, you left me feeling almost panicky with the thoughts of a thundering freight train booming down the tracks with no breaks! Really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Brett Martin Smith New Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 4 |
"Nothing Nothing Everything" I like this statement - the truth in the contradiction. It reminds me of "nothing changes, nothing remains the same". I picture this as the end of a relationship. How close am I to the truth? ...but then again it could be the end of almost anything... Thanks... |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
This was very intense to read! Great job you did with this. I felt like I was watching something about to happen and nothing I could do. Fantastic poem! Take care. Amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
very nice poem.....Liked it!!  Julie :) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
No rainbow light of morning come, no salmon sky, no thought undone- nothing nothing everything-- rhythm of your sleep I sing and none can stop it now... ----------------- nothing nothing everything can make it any other way-- none can stop it now. Not the gentle in your eyes nor sadness in the cling of sighs... nothing nothing everything-- beyond us--all is lies-- and none can stop it now... ------------ *how long will I sit here unable to find the words* you hold my heart in your hand with this one my sweet twin... I seem to be at a loss to adequately tell you how this poem effects me... but then I know...you already know breathtaking and stunning cuts deep ... to the bone ... we cant stop the rain either me twin... we would'nt even try ... love you me |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
serenity, Not the gentle in your eyes nor sadness in the cling of sighs... nothing nothing everything-- beyond us--all is lies-- and none can stop it now... a powerful poem especially the last verse which hits really hard. intense and excellently written. A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
S'en, Such as eloquent comparison of the lonely beauty of being awake to see the dawn, and the disappointments in our lives. Both are impossible to stop, and in hindsight (and sometimes during) things of inevitable wonder. Awesome as always, S'en. Mike |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
as usual i am enthralled by your writing. i love the subtle story's, that ruminate my wit. Kindly, Redheart Angrybraids |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* needed seconds needed some oxygen *inhaling your words* ahhhhhhh feel better ... better than rasberry tea (hehe) *kiss kiss* later-me-twin-gator me loves ya me baby-dont you work so hard for this prize you've found ... it will all be gone-when you turn around ... cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick R |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your rhythm finds its place here...very lyrical and lovely, sad, striking... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
I almost cried. I love it. "None can stop it now"-- isn't that the truth. Sometimes all the hope and prayers and sighs in the world can't stop what will happen. Thanx for sharing such a beautiful poem. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderfully written, Serenity! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb my friend. . . just excellent. . . You've really found it with this one. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks to all for your kind words of encouragement. As always, It is much appreciated. |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Wonderfully written...great read,Serenity!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Serenity there is a certain deepness to this that reaches in. Deep emotion, heck not sure how to describe it! It's unique and I for one really enjoyed reading this one. It stirs a person! |
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