Open Poetry #8 |
Tears |
kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Tears So many teardrops Enough to fill a sea Loosing control What is happening to me Drenched by my sorrow Too tired to wipe my eyes A heart so unprepared And taken by surprise Shattered into pieces Afraid to put them back Hoping that somehow It’s a nightmare and just that Trying to hold on To images of the past Looking for someway To hold on and make them last Far into the distance I can hear the devil laugh He found another victim To add onto his staff My eyes no longer glitter With the happiness they once had They glitter with tears of sorrow The devil must be glad |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely writing...Kat perhaps the devil doesn't care but there are people that do care and even though we all have sad times in our lives soon enough happiness will come into your life once again. Take care, James |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such heartfelt emotions in this Kat ... I do hope you find some happiness after the tears. Lovely flow and sentiments ... very well done! Best wishes (and a hug), /Kit |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
kat, this was beautifully sad and very emotionally intense. i too hope you find some comfort through the tears. times will get better, just gotta have faith! take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
James thanks, but I do know he's laughing and I hope soon comes real quick. Kit: I hope I do find some happiness after the tears also and I hope it's all just a nightmare and goes away. Thanks Amy: Having faith is what gave me these tears. At the moment finding comfort is hard but I hope things get better. Thanks. |
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MysticalNights Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 112Oklahoma |
kat, wonderful poem. so heartfelt.. truly lovely work.. A Dream is a Wish the Heart Makes... |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
this would make an excellent song, kindly, redheart angrybraids |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
MysticalNights: Thank-you, i'm glad you liked it. It came from my heart. Redheart: Thanks so much for that compliment. Never actually looked at it as a song but come to think of it, you never know. kat |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Oh kat This is the real insect Here's my shoulder to soak up this effect Leave that place immediately, I'm here, defect It hurts me to see your feelings wrecked May I send you some lines U may not expect ___________________________ Kittens Cute little furry balls Trying to make big catcalls Bounce sideways in attacks Try not to land on their backs Nipping each other's paws Back away from mothers claws Mother grooms them to silk Giving them her life milk Racing in every direction Sharing each others affection Here's one for you to keep Soft in your hand, a furball asleep ____________________________ I hope that cheered you up a little I decided to put it in the middle Bye bye my playful little kitten This is my string of affection Now becomes eighth in your section |
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polishflyer New Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 5 |
This description is exactly how I feel at this time right now. It is beautiful in dipicting what a broken heart feels like. |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
I truly need a shoulder To soak up this effect Wishing that somehow From this nightmare I would defect Your poem kittens is so sweet of you I must say, you’ve shown me another side Trying so much to cheer me up Trying to take me on another ride But my ride right now has gotten steep Like a roller coaster heading down No ups in sight that I can see Wishing so hard to turn it around A month ago I did not foresee That this ride would hit with such a blow So tears keep rolling down my cheek My eyes have lost their happy glow So I thank-you insect for your rhyme And for trying to put a smile on me For in the past I’ve laughed so hard To the rhymes we wrote so crazily Insect, thanks! Polish: It's exactly what I'm depicting, and something I've never felt before. Thanks. |
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