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Meet This Heart (one- syllable )
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Meet This Heart (one- syllable ) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Meet this heart she does not mend, weeps in night that knows not end. In fear, she shies, from spark of singe-- blood from this heart, ink in my pen. Hear her wail in death of wind, these words of lack, call him, but "friend..." |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
hello, i'm there right now, just trembling on down the paper, watching the waking tower of friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
me thinks your trying to make me cry and make me muse jealous... one syllable, one line,one verse ... your words touch like a sweet poetic curse. *kiss kiss* me sweet... sleep and the night does end  me loves ya jm |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow ... you put such emotion-filled thoughts into such a compact package! You made that look too easy Serenity ... really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serentiy~ Of love well said out of your head In your heart not to part Just a friend through to the end Great job my friend ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, fabulous writing!! spellbinding!  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Serenity, In awe at this piece So much you have said A job well done, my friend! amazed at this open-ended poem, leaving the reader to wonder and figure things out for himself...WOW! BTW, if you have some time to spare, will you mind reading my "One syllable poem(for parker's challenge" in Open#8...thanx in advance |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Serenity, you're one of the best writers I know. Mike |
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polishflyer New Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 5 |
Very touching. I like how such meaning in forced out in such a small sample. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Serenity~ This was captivating... Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
to all m'friends--thank you so much to Mike--wish you were here--you would appreciate serenity hugging herself...and wet monitor kisses too....y'be a lovely man. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, this was amazing, you are good... so where's the picture.. Oh didn't you read the fine print, must supply pic to win.... surprise prize, and it ain't wearing a cowboy hat...lol Parker |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Ooooh I like this Serenity. The subject seemed dark and the one syllable words and the overall structure make this flow like a dark chant enhancing the mood wonderfully. Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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