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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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a glass jar of sweets on the cabinet now sits a brand too expensive to be bought by me tidbits of her where she knew I would see a card in your nightstand addressed to you unsigned of course no need just a friend you say tidbits of her yes indeed a new shirt hanging in your closet I find no tags no receipt tidbits of her where she ought not to be a phone call late clicks closed when footsteps intrude wrong number you say tidbits of her stealing moments from me car trouble you claim as the clock winds into the morn perfumed remainders indiscretions unfold gaping mouth won’t close disbelief enfolds your collar indelibly inscribed rose colored tidbits of her I wish I could unsee |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH GIRL---- C, this one is awesome... man, your wrote this with a bleeding pen my friend... I know how bad this feels..and you wrote it out to the letter... and with your usual edge...and grace take care, please jm |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
this is just too good! ok, but how do you do this??? LOL... You must live in my head!! hehe this is really a fine piece of work, m'friend.. loved these lines below, especially... your style is pounding, honest, with an cutting edge that hits so hard... i feel every bit of this... great work! "tidbits of her stealing moments from me" "car trouble you claim as the clock winds into the morn perfumed remainders indiscretions unfold gaping mouth won’t close disbelief enfolds your collar indelibly inscribed rose colored tidbits of her I wish I could unsee " |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks you two, am glad you enjoyed.... both of you, your comments always touch me  |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
This is so honest and insightful. It takes so much strength to see. Your writing is amazing. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
My mouth agape, all I could utter is a "WOW"... How did that happen? you may ask Your words made me feel that way, thats how... regards to you, Corazon, sudhir. Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
what a nice compliment jan thank you sudhir, you always are so kind..thank you much |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is so powerful and emotional Corazon! Left me feeling the pain myself ... really excellent writing here! Best wishes, /Kit |
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