Open Poetry #8 |
Through Your Eyes |
Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Through Your Eyes Through your eyes... I see much The depth of your soul The secrets of your heart Through your eyes... I feel all The warmth of your touch The gentleness of your kiss Through your eyes... I have love Sharing our breath Merging our hearts Through your eyes... I tell all My life given over To my trust in you Through your eyes... I offer this The respect as one The truth in love Through your eyes... I give to you The passage to me Through my eyes Mark Bohannan |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Thanks Mark a great poem expresses what I feel about "the windows to our soul " Olias |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
One of the first things I notice is someones eyes, if they are kind, trusting, loving, etc. Your poem described that long, deep stare, that desire, that love between two people when they look into eachothers eyes! So romantic and filled with tender love, Me liked it |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! This is beautiful Mark! I'm so glad you joined us here! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Olias, thanks for the comments and they are truely the windows to our soul. To a romantic heart-- glad you liked it. Look forward to yours and your input. Poet deVine-- again thanks and I am glad to be here with such talent. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Mark I guess I've got to say that I would like to have read "In your eyes" but maybe I am missing something here. It seeems to me that you, are analysing her through your eyes. Maybe not, the wonderful trickery of poetry. I find it very very good work! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ethome; thanks for the comments and all I can say on the analyze thing is that the look is and was that brief moment when hearts are traded, but your interpretation definitely opens new avenues for discussion on what different people see in the same mask. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Through your eyes... I offer this The respect as one The truth in love Through your eyes... I give to you The passage to me Through my eyes ----------- Mark, this is a gorgeous poem.. sensual, intense, and deep in emotions. the last two lines are perfect. Im really enjoying your work that Ive seen so far... look forward to seeing more through your eyes jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
per our discussion... back to the top... and Mark... you need to submit... A"signature poem" would be the perfect choice to reflect your work in the book later-eyes say it all-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
JM-Thank you so much and I will cosider the book thing. It is just when I compare mine to the crowd around here they seem to falter a bit. You are too sweet. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark.... Your writings always warm my heart and help me realize that there are a few romantics left in this world..... Beautiful job here!!!!!! ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You write like a man in love! Corinne |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mark~ you really can see into a person, by looking into their eyes.....this is beautiful,and very romantic. I really enjoyed this. -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very expressive, Mark ... nice read ... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I have to agree with J.M. this is book material......Mark this is SO beautiful!! Seeing love through the eyes of another...windows to the soul, You captured the feeling and sent me spinning with this piece!! Through your eyes... I see much The depth of your soul The secrets of your heart Truly an exquisite piece~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You know how I feel...you know never say never |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Quite lovely...more, please! |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Mark, You have a talent that is so remarkable. You have been gifted by the imagination, the truth and all wisdom that life gives us. The difference is, you use it so powerfully it grips everyone. Great Writting!!!!!~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sunny1-how sweet your reply. Thank you so much. Corinne-I once was. SEA-so glad you enjoyed it. MA-thank you much Bdc-anytime you want to feel dizzy....LOL thank you from my heart and soul. Paula-the eyes never lie if you look into them. sunshine-more on the way soon. Thank you. my ego enjoys a request for an encore. Beth-Wow how do I reply to that? All I can say is you touch me with your replies. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Through your eyes... I give to you The passage to me Through my eyes" Beautiful Mark! You wove your thoughts so eloquently in this tender poem ... what an enchanting closing to this lovely verse! Loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Kit-thank you so much |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mark~ This is a truly beautiful piece seen through your eyes...thanks for sharing Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Traci-thank you so much for the read and I am glad you liked the look. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Yet another perfect poem of yours!!! I loved it! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak? I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleep |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Yes Yes Yes!!!! Definitely for the book.....resubmit so i can vote....Just beautiful......My favorite of yours for sure!!! (although I do like them all!!!) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very beautiful, Mark. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sauni-Thank you so much. I can always count on you for kindness. JulieAnn-It shall be done and I am glad it is a favorite of yours. That humbles me so. Martie-Thank you so much. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
A really lovely poem. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mark this is lovely. Please don't compare your writing to "the crowd", only to what you feel in your heart. That is what makes your poem appealing. And it is very beautiful Liz |
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