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Open Poetry #8

A Broken Forever

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

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with you

0 posted 2000-06-21 09:59 AM

Forever heard
Forever spoken
Forever promised
Forever broken
Forever cheat
Forever lie
Forever question
Forever cry.

-SEA-

* this is a bit different for me, I hope it works*

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-06-21 10:01 AM

works fine. More can be said in less, as is done here. Nice poetry.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

2 posted 2000-06-21 10:26 AM

It works!!! Many things can be communicated with little or few words.

Thanks for the welcome and the comments on mine.

OLIAS
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since 2000-06-20

Posts 1090
Pearl city Iowa

3 posted 2000-06-21 10:50 AM

Brilliant and to the point, not a word wasted, great poem I love the rythmn

Olias

BSC

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since 2000-02-04

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New York, USA

4 posted 2000-06-21 11:00 AM

SEA - Perfect in its simplicity. Well done. Bonnie

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2000-06-21 11:03 AM

Sea,
It works for me. *L*

JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12

Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

6 posted 2000-06-21 02:31 PM

I loved it!!! Couldn't be said any better and believe me alot is spoken here in these few lines that I can relate to!! Thanks for sharing this!!

Julie :)

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

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ireland

7 posted 2000-06-21 03:22 PM

a lot said in few words really enjoed the poem

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2000-06-21 03:52 PM

Mike~ thank you very much

Mark~ thanks and you are welcome

Olias~ glad you liked this!

BSC~ thank you

Seymour~ I'm glad, thank you

JulieAnn~ I'm sorry you can relate,but thank you for the reply

Brian~thanks for reading

-SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

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