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The Profundity of Knees and You
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The Profundity of Knees and You |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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to draw a finger along the ambit of your knee privileges me a smile transformed ment by move the lifting of lines and echoing arch of cheeks it is for these and you I breathe astonished profound the voice a goal of mine to hear in the air I pass a hand through how profound your knees overlooked and disdained the impression they make on the cover of a bed and the impression of the cover over your sleep to follow a hand with my eye’s curve watch ebon and aurora battle on your skin profundity it yells in quiet places and for these and you I love ~Sleeping Beauty never knew how lucky she really was~ (Me) |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Wow, I have this absolutely striking image of someone I love's knees. It's weird that you would write a poem about something that has hidden in my heart for ages!  You have taken something so mundane as knees and painted them so romantically. I love this ~Heather |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A "knee fetish", eh??? just joking, LOL  nice poem K, very nice...regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very interesting, Severn! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Severn: Oh what the fingertips feel.....mostly how the imagination works combined with the way we want to feel, even kneecaps...LOL Bless HUGS |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's quite an in depth descripition of the knees. Very good title. Profundity Of Knees And You. Expressions of love can be made in so many beautiful ways..Very clever work! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marvelous!!! I love this one....  |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Severn,...I love the way this is written and posted. Wow,...I am not sure that I have read much of your work,....but after this I shall take a bit and look some up. Much enjoyed this. It read so soft. Thank you for sharing. *Peace. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lovely indeed Kamla.... and this..... to follow a hand with my eye’s curve watch ebon and aurora battle on your skin very nice My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
damn... *sigh* man o man ...  jm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla, this is a perfect poetic glance of loving. Wonderful! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Well now -- you certainly have a way with catchy titles, don't you my dear...? (I mean, how could anyone read that title and not be dying to read the poem behind it??) Beyond the title, though -- I shall never look at knees the same ever again, I fear. How artfully you were able to bring elegance to what would seem a most inelegant part of the body ... you are truly a gifted poet, Kamla. Applause! "to draw a finger along the ambit of your knee privileges me ..." Wow! --Me YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Sigh K. Ever a way with words. Inasmuch as I abhor doing so, I mast agree with Kess on your title choices. And to boot (or knee) your content never leaves me anything less than thinking! And that my friend as you know... is what it's about. Smiles! C. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Nice poem LK but where are you ?... that damned elusive sp |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
auh, i loved this poem, the way you wrote the words, really relayed the feeling of your thought, as if i was listening to you think, it was totally lovely, i feel light heartedly melancholy, not sad but aroused by saddnesses glory. kindly, redheart angrybraids |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Heather - you wouldn't believe the strange things that happen...lol... I guess it is more than romance - it is simply life. Or perhaps it isn't really simple at all... thankyou! Sudhir - a fetish! HUMPH!  laughing here...thankyou my friend...Elizabeth - hehe...thankyou... RG - yeah...what the fingertips feel... thanks hon. Hugs. ethome - hey - thanks, appreciate it...I agree about the expressions of love PdV - why thankyou... Spitfire - and that is so encouraging for me. Big smiles here and thankyou very much AoL NOT D - thanks for reading hon...hugs FBG - LOL! I got a sigh - that is a good thing indeed! Cheers... Martie - thankyou sweet friend! Kess - hey, wow, thankyou! You would know all about being a gifted poet though... C - I do indeed...thinking hey...lol...or trying not to...or trying to think about thinking and how thinking about thinking can cave your head in...lol! Thankyou. Sir P - you got it right for once - yes YOU are the elusive one...hugs and thanks Redheart - what an effect! That is so awesome...thankyou so much! K ~Sleeping Beauty never knew how lucky she really was~ (Me) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A very nice soft spoken poem,,,, interesting use of the word ambit--- it has so many meanings.....offering a leg... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, Severny one!!! My knees would be honored to make an impression on your covers!! I will always be your friend in kneed btw....LOVE the poem! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Severn ... New to the site and I'm loving it already ... This piece is very seductive: read it twice to get the sense; read it thrice to stay the tense. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Severn, I never thought of knees as been attractive, well not my own anyway, I don't think they are my best feature though your poem had me ready to dust off my shorts until I realised I have quiet hairy legs. aw well. LOL. back to the poem what can I say but they must be some knees that has to be the most beautiful poem written about that part of the body and also one of the most unusual love poems I have ever read. "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else" faster-Manic street preachers. |
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