Open Poetry #8 |
Awake Again |
whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
" Awake Again " One Glance Seen within All the hurt All the sin Out of Self Scared Inside No where to run No where to hide Rattled trees Howling moon Stars beaming Running lost Dont look behind Screaming voice No-one can hear Silent fear Eyes wide Strong sense Ears open Hair stands Demon seen Heart races Blood flows Legs stiff No where to stay No where to go Dreams ends Awake again |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Whiskey!! With all the power and fear of a nightmare. . . superb images. . . Superb. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very good .. the flow word was great on page! Lovely poem Whiskey Coco |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Yes very good,,,,,dreams that you are falling is what this reminded me of..... Great work Julie :) |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Whiskey, I've never read any of your poetry before, but I'll be sure to do so in the future. To describe a nightmare in such a way it makes me think you must have written this after experiencing a harsh one. I wish you sweeter dreams in the future ^_^ Amanda "Come what come may, time and the hour runs through the roughest day." A line from Macbeth, by William Shakespear |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
About half way through I noticed my heart beating faster and a distinct sense of panic. I was competely caught up! Great Work. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Whiskey~ Nightmare indeed! I've had many..... this is really good! -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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