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Veil of Night
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Veil of Night |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
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She leaves me breathless, pale-glowing her light shines over and around me I am stone of morbid concretion in a body, frozen and inarticulate dazzled, into the silence I stare, and waver beneath the dark veil of night where giddy stars resemble coloured fairy lights electrified sighing.... I gaze upon her. Angel of Darkness June 2000 My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful, Maree.....but then your work is always soft and flowing...  |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Mmmmm wow!!!!!!  lovely work! ~Heather |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow what a cool poem love your format and presentation and the impact of the emotions are perfect great writing jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
I really loved this poem-it's soft and alluring. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon Dear, Than you so much for your always lovely reply  Heather, Thank you!! glad you liked.Janet Marie, I do appreciate your comments, Thank you, glad you liked. Thanks Jan, glad you loved it. My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey you - where are you? Are you over there yet? I miss you hon... and this is beautiful...as usual!!! I will talk to you soon k? K~Sleeping Beauty never knew how lucky she really was~ (Me) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
blame it on the server...of course... LOL! have another then Maree...[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
dazzled, into the silence I stare, and waver beneath the dark veil of night where giddy stars resemble coloured fairy lights electrified sighing.... I gaze upon her. ..... a beautiful flowing poem this! really enjoyed reading this one... Regards, sudhir |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Simply warm and flowing. . . Your work always amazes me Maree. . . this is no exception. . . Just wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Ah! Such is the splendor of the eve. But my soul doth cry,"Who is the one which gazes upon her dark beauty?" Mystified, ^_^ Amanda Shall I compare thee to a summer's day? Thou art more lovely and more temperate, Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May, And summer's lease hath all too short a date. Sometimes too hot the eye of heaven shines, And often is his gold complexion dimmed; And every fair from fair sometimes declines, By chance or nature's changing course, untrimmed. But thy eternal summer shall not fade, Nor lose possession of that fair thou ow'st; Nor shall death brag thou wand'rest in his shade, When in eternal lines to time thou grow'st. So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this gives life to thee. William Shakespeare |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Been quite awhile since reading your poetry!! This was good!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Dark Angel! Mystical and flowing, your format and sentiments are splendid! Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
I liked this. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Beautiful writing, as always DA ! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DA~ this is GREAT! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Miss K, where am I ? here!!! are you over there yet? hmmm nope I don't think so heheheThank you for your reply and I miss you too Sudhir thanks so much for your lovely reply and I am glad you enjoyed it. Sven, you are such a sweetie, thank you. I hope I continue to amaze you  LadySofia, thanks so much for your lovely reply. My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Justbleu, Thank you so very much Kit, thanks again Glad you liked kitkat thanks Munda thanks you again Sea, so glad you liked it. Thanks to all! My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oooh Dark Angel...your words cascade down the page with a gorgeous flow and powerful emotion...Wonderful work indeed! *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a beautiful setting with such mood capturing smooth flowing lines. Very very well done! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
just another good piece from you. i'll keep reading as long as you write. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I love the line " Of morbid concretion ", this is very descriptive, a wonderful piece, Thankyou, I hope to read more Olias |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
I love the line " Of morbid concretion ", this is very descriptive, a wonderful piece, Thankyou, I hope to read more Olias |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I am stone of morbid concretion in a body, frozen and inarticulate Wow This poem says so much, haunting and beautiful. Loved it |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Alwye, thanks you so very much sweetie ethome glad you enjoyed.... thank you Jeremiah, Thank you!! I'll keep writing as long as you keep reading Olios, Thank you very much. Satiate, Wow your comment means so much to me, thank you. My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ What a delight .... both the poem and seeing your smiling face ! Love ya' gal ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Maree! Denise |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Dark Angel, Wonderful writing. Your words seem to flow effortlessly from your pen. Great job!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So nice to see your face Dark Angel...your poetry is always my pleasure to read! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Margey, Thanks so much hon I hope one day to see your smiling face too. "love ya back" Denise, thanks so much hon Lone Wolf, Thanks Dear for your lovely reply Martie, Thanks so much Sweet One, Your Poetry is MY pleasure to read. Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I shall repose in the afterglow of your bright wit and pen, While looking ever forward to, the time I read it again. I am more amazed at each one of yours I discover. jamie [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
ooops,,, sent twice [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, you are so kind with your replies, I thank you for your support *hugs* my friend Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A cascade of beauty, this was an amazing weave D.A.~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice, DA... I like it..  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
BDC, thanks ever so much Nan, thank you, I'm so glad you liked it Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Simply Awesome!!! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Nice, loved it, thanks . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Maree, Your talent shines through in this amazing poem. I don't know how you do it lIz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Angelswing and Eagleone, thank you so very much Ellizabeth, Wow you are so kind with your replies Thank you so very much! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
Great poem...so chilling and detailed Blessed Be, beth |
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Bustem57 Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 98 |
Wonderful!! Just wonderful!!! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
DA~ Always the beautiful soulful poet Lovely hon Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Beth, Bustem and Tracie, I thank you for your truly wonderful replies. I do appreciate them so. Thanks again |
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