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Dear Heart ('Guess!')
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Dear Heart ('Guess!') |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL 
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(Dear Heart,) One last dance together? You know one is never enough. Promise as you may, you just can't leave her touch. I wish I knew the words, that could banish this lovely spell. I wish I knew the words, to help you say "farewell" I'd burn all the memories, and never think of her again. But I can't cover this hole, and noone else fits in. So you stare up at me and bleed, reminding me that you're there. I promise you there's better, but you just don't seem to care. You only want that one, you can't see through your pain. You only want that one, because noone else is the same. Yes, I ripped her from your core, I swear it was for your own good. Just give this one a chance, I'd do it for you if I could. I show you all the differences, but you just won't readjust. If I could take back one act, that "love" I'd never trust. (Sincerely, Mind) --Dave [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Sir Dave, I think you should submit this to VOTW It is definitely one of the best (I) have seen from you  All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Powerful stuff Dave A wonderful read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Dave~ A powerful message and an awesome read!! I'd burn all the memories, and never think of her again. But I can't cover this hole, and noone else fits in. I know this feeling all to well...you captured it...much like putting a bird in a VERY small cage...a painful imprisonment. Thank you for sharing this~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i didnt need to guess... i knew ... and i knew why ... and i hope your heart listens to your mind... cause this poem's wisdom is true... and there IS somthing better out there for you....I PROMISE!!!! and ya know i wouldnt lie to a poet  and yes..submit this or your favorite to the book... YOU KNOW which one I think it should be... my shadow poet ... I was reading that one the other day... as its printed out and kept with my fav poem collection... and it still effects me like the first time I read it ... it is such an awesome poem... take care of you for me my dave-gator later jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Thank you all for the warm welcome back. Glad you enjoyed it. Jeff, what is VOTW? --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
wow so sad! VotW is the Passions Book....Voices on the Web..I too echo him in saying, please submit this! This is great! ~Heather |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Captivating indeed Coco |
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Eskendale Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 17 |
Such things of life that can cause so much suffering through a mere emotion... And poetry, often paired with praises of goodness, also can warn those unwary of harsh fates. I thank you for telling this tale. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, you had me fooled! Thanks, WhiteNite. Well done! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
So beautiful but yet so sad. I really enjoyed this one and I agree you should submit it. kat |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow... I got replies! Coolness! =) Thank you all for your compliments and comments. I've clicked teh "submit this to the next book" check box thingie... I guess that's what you all were talking about. =) It's been a while sense I've gotten a response like this.. thank you!!!!! =) I'm glad you all enjoyed it so much. Special thanks to those of you who guessed. --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ok now we can vote on it to go in the book now go over to the new forum just below this open and post Passing Shadows as another submit or you can repost it here... lots of poems to vote for over in the Voices on the Web forum and if ya want more info on it go to the members area forums there is a post explaining it.. NOW DO AS I SAID!!!  later-davey-gator |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Ya know Jan, for someone who likes that poem so much you're a little choppy on the title. (snicker) Had to bust your chops on that one. I believe "Passing Shadows" is someone's UserName. "Chasing Shadows" is my poem. Still love ya though. --Dave"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Cool, 'bout time I can vote on this one LOL All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed this very much...do keep writing, please. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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