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repost for the book thingie...vote for me. i voted for you.
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repost for the book thingie...vote for me. i voted for you. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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My Rose Falling in love; it hurts so much. The pain just grows as you're falling apart. But how is it that it hurts even more If I never had you from the start. Does any of this mean one damn thing? Is this all just wasted time i've spent? I always trip on the line that divides who I am and who I invent. Neither one of us will let the other in too deep. Too afraid of what the other's gonna think. All this pain and failure makes me feel like I've been living a hundred years. I can't remember ever sleeping without a pillow full of tears. My soul is abused and gone; I keep coming back for more. You're the prettiest rose in the garden; And I'm bleeding from the thorns. How can wanting to give you the world be something I shouldn't feel? Are cold shoulders and dodging eyes signs of emotions not so real? You never could really look me in the eye. Cover up your lies with all my truths. Haven't you heard? Love's a two-way street. I got a feeling I'm bein' used. The past always holds the better days. Then I tripped on the feeling of being alive. I mistook you for someone who gave a damn. The good memories are struggling to survive. I was on my knees, prayin' for rain. Didn't know I'd get a storm. You're the prettiest rose in the garden; and I'm bleeding from the thorns. Maybe someplace, far from now When I don't need to remember anymore, I'll stop by and pay you a visit to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor. While I'm there, I'd also like back my intensity and my attitude. And if you're finished, I'd like my soul and all the emotions you abused. If you could just take off your armor and leave your status home for the night. See the Me you always ignore. See the Me you could learn to like. Why am I the Runner-up whenever i run your race? But play the game inside my heart and you'll always get first place. Gave you my heart but you didn't seem to know what it was for. You still the prettiest rose in the garden. And I'm still bleeding from the thorns. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
And I'm still bleeding from the thorns. Ethan - this is a wonderful poem -so heartfelt and sad - ~netswan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Ethan you have said it all so well...after going thru this a few times I have come to the conclusion that...I couldn't help falling in love with her...and she couldn't help not falling in love with me. James |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is really descriptive, you express it so well! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Very nice Ethan...thanks for reposting.. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
dear all repliers thanks for the kinds words everyone. they mean a lot. James: boy-o-boy, you summed it right up for me! it's the story of life. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ethan this was beautiful! seems you and I are on the same page these days. glad to see we are both working it out with our pen and paper. take care my friend. amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"I always trip on the line that divides who I am and who I invent." "I can't remember ever sleeping without a pillow full of tears." Incredible emotions pour forth from your heart to your pen Ethan (loved the lines up above especially). Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Maybe someplace, far from now When I don't need to remember anymore, I'll stop by and pay you a visit to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor. While I'm there, I'd also like back my intensity and my attitude. And if you're finished, I'd like my soul and all the emotions you abused. -------------------- told ya id find it *smile* this is the first one of your i ever read if memory serves me right... either way its one of my faves glad you submitted it later-ethan-gator jm |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW Amazingly descriptive Count my vote All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Liked it much very lovely words but sad  |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love your expression here both sad and lovely. keep up your writings and i'll keep reading them. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Related well to the angst and underlying vulnerability.....and I voted for you anyway...lol...hugs to ya. |
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