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theKUTEone
New Member

since 2000-06-17

Posts 4

0 posted 2000-06-18 04:34 PM

Hey guys! Here is a poem I wrote. I hope you guys like it. I don't have a title for it yet, so if you would be so kind as to help me think of one and tell me, truthfully, how you like the poem. Here it is.

How can love be called an illusion?
A fantasy within the realm of time.
When everyday it is a reality
Living within this heart of mine.

If loving you were an illusion
Would this longing not disappear?
Would the love not fade as the sunset
When the darkness appears?

How long shall I live within this fantasy
That you will come to me?
How long will I believe that you are inlove with me?
As long as heaven shines
With star lit night.
As long as the birds soar in wondrous flight.

I will wait for you my love
As long as the sun shines in the sky above.
For loving you is my reality. It is my forevermore.
Time will bring your love to be.
As surely as the sea will rush to shore.
For I know the longing within my heart is as real
As yours is for me.
I am waiting patiently for your love
For we are meant to be.

~~theKUTEone~~Sara

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

1 posted 2000-06-18 05:50 PM

first of all great poem in touched my heart. we'll i think the name should be something like mystery.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-06-18 06:22 PM

I enjoyed this and all the cool thoughts and the softness of your heart...hope that the guy you are waiting for appreciates your love and your desire...suggest the title be "Love and desire" or how about "Meant to be". I know the title is in your heart. James

Jenabou
Member

since 2000-06-13

Posts 215
Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA

3 posted 2000-06-18 08:40 PM

hey
great poem.
i think a good title wuld be "Illusion?"
or "Love is not an illusion"
good work
keep em coming

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

4 posted 2000-06-18 09:01 PM

lovely poem.

title, hmmm, I'm not good at this, how about Love's Reality?

Corinne

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

5 posted 2000-06-18 11:44 PM

Wonderful poem , Very well written , As for a title I think something like " If love were illusion " or " Love is real "

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

6 posted 2000-06-19 12:04 PM

Great poem and welcome to passions

as a title I think it should be....

"Love, Illusion Or Reality?"

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

kitkat
Senior Member

since 2000-01-11

Posts 878
Nova Scotia

7 posted 2000-06-19 01:24 AM

I like this too. I think the title "Illusion"
is a good one.

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

8 posted 2000-06-19 03:24 AM

great poem! the love you have for this lucky person is definitely not an illusion. be glad you are able to have these feelings for someone that has them back for you. it's a rarity. enjoy it while it lasts.

as for a title...how 'bout...
Real Love

great read. keep up the good stuff. i dig it.

We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

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