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Wet with Goodbye
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Wet with GoodbyeThe carriageman's cloak, flying over the back board, whips wild in the wet of the wind and I, sir, and you, cannot help but draw closer 'gainst the chill of the darkening bend Our shoulders together As thunder cracks hard and crawls slow 'cross the grey, lowering sky, this night we move over the moist layered land under trees laden wet with goodbye For our journey has brought us once again to part ways and to station, to station we fly Through the heavy green hills soaked and soiled, rock to earth, 'long roadside and on toward shore it is heaviest here, in my heart, dearest one and for you I will long, evermore ~ Claire |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again... might not pass for Rebecca... so will have to opt for Heathcliff... in case it wasn't evident... I love the gothic tone of this piece... absolutely exquisite beauty wrapped in a haunting sorrow. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh, Claire, this is good -- be a great piece for a historical novel  ~netswan |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
"Trees laden wet with goodbye"--how descriptive, Claire. Well done. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, somehow I have an easier time of it seeing you as Heathcliff than as Rebecca...go figure, eh? Thank you for the gracious commentary. I was reviewing some photographs of Ireland when I became inspired to write this piece. Netswan, thank you very much. That's rather what I was thinking while writing it. Elizabeth, thank you, as well, for the "well done"...you are so kind. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
had to come back to enjoy again... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent Claire. . . welcome back. . . it's been a long time. . . This was wonderful, full of beautiful imagery. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Claire, this was one of the most wonderful pieces of poetry I have read in a long time. And I have read alot of great poetry lately. But WOW, what a piece of work! WOW what a piece of art. I loved the mournful, haunted tone of this...as Mike so aptly put..gothic...  divine writing m'dear... ~Heather [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Claire, I simply LOVE the way you write. This reminded me of the moors, and of the Irish potato-plight. That may sound silly and far from the true meaning, but this is where my head went  I haven't been around of late to read your recent stuff but I'll try to catch up dear  ^_^ Amanda "Come what come may, time and the hour runs through the roughest day." A line from Macbeth, by William Shakespear |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, you flatter me, my friend. Sven, thank you. It feels good to be "back"... I'm glad you enjoyed this one. X Angel, for such an enthusiastic commentary, I must thank you, in earnest. As for the gothic tone, thanks. It could be, though, that I'm just old. LadySofia, not silly whatsoever. Matter of fact, the moors of Ireland are what inspired this piece. (That, and my aching heart, but that's an old story... ) Thank you so much for taking time to read and respond to this...I've not been "around" lately either...and am awfully glad to be back. Take care,~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh...another dream of writing... You do it well Claire... K |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Through the heavy green hills soaked and soiled, rock to earth, 'long roadside and on toward shore it is heaviest here, in my heart, dearest one and for you I will long, evermore ........ very beautiful writing as always from you Claire... regards, sudhir. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Claire~ you are amazing, and this is wonderful....*vote* -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Claire....I just noticed...now I know WHY I like you so much....that Thoreau quote! I am a Thoreau fan, big style......my fave.... "I would rather sit on a pumpkin all by myself, than be crowded on a velvet cushion" *smiles* ~Heather |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kamla, Sudhir, Sea, Heather...thank you, each, for reading and letting me know that you enjoyed this piece. (Heather, one of my favorite Thoreau lines too... )~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love this Claire..so beautiful!!!  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Claire, I literally got chills reading this. Absolutely beautiful writing. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Ms. PoetdV, thank you. Your responses are always so enthusiastic, and I appreciate each word. Jeffrey, should I say I'm glad it gave you chills? Well, I am! Thanks so much for letting me know you liked this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
...and what a beautiful piece to herald your return! This is absolutely wonderful, Claire! I could picture it in my mind! Well done! Welcome back! Hope you can stay for a long time! Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh that is so vivid! What wonder causing word pictures you paint here. Just excellent work. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I was lost in the picture you painted and the words were gone, only the feel that you brought was listened and real. Wonderful Claire, so glad to see you!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, Wonderful images. Great writing!! Welcome back!! Looking forward to more. LW< !signature--> Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
Wow meadowmuse it's been a long time since I've read one of your works, and it is always refreshing to feel movement and rhythm in poesy. Not ever one poem of yours have I read ever lacked this flow. |
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