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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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SEVEN Who, there, yet lies cognizant of The Power of the Pawn? By seven sacred circles wreaks The call of Death by Dawn! Eden, the groaning specter of A God given to dream, Creeps and crawls the impassive halls Of eschewed self-esteem. Lo, there, waking the wounded, (Thus imbued - the living dead), Stays the Furies, tempts the Fates, And holds Time to a thread. One man, he stands, too proud to fall And yet too tired to see -- Seven sacred circles shall bind Him all eternity. Smote the ferryman's delight, Seven rings around the sun! Reverence imbued, duly renewed, Shall all appear as "One". Full moon over the Darkness, yet Perceive this bleeder's call -- By mourning Night, by grim delight, Know one shall ne'er be "All". Too crude, too lewd, too shrewd for time, A fast-forgotten thing; In moment spent - a dream forewent ‘Neath feather-folded wing. Prelude to the sullen cry, (forever to implore me); "Seven rings around the sun, What six yet fell before me?" Oh, Keeper of the Tower, watch What hope but lies in wonder! Seven Brothers, bearing gifts, (The Seven laws of Thunder)! Shake the heavens, peel the passion Of this madness-tinged eye. Seven sacred circles and falls The tower from the sky! Shields raised, swords drawn, yet meet The call of aching Sorrow. Defend phantom Yesterday, All hope be to the morrow! Pleasure in the open wound, I readily admit it. Seven Brothers, palms laid bare, I never shall forget it! Michael Anderson [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Someone recently told me to "modernize" my poetry, that is was "junk" and "maple syrup dumped on unsuspecting readers" it nearly broke my spirit. We write from our hearts, and to myself, it knows no time, for I could read Shakespeare 1000 times and still weep. and I could read this once, and cry. and I did it was so beautiful. Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Smote the ferryman's delight, Seven rings around the sun! Reverence imbued, duly renewed, Shall all appear as "One". Full moon over the Darkness, yet Perceive this bleeder's call -- By mourning Night, by grim delight, Know one shall ne'er be "All". Too crude, too lewd, too shrewd for time, A fast forgotten thing; In moment spent - a dream forewent ‘Neath feather folded wing. Prelude to the sullen cry, (forever to implore me); "Seven rings around the sun, What six have fell before me?" -------------- AWESOME AMAZING ASTONISHING **** EXCELLENT EXQUISITE EXCEPTIONAL **** DAMN FINE RHYME TOO  do ya get the feeling i loved this one *smile* later-Shakes-gator jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm...you're speaking my language again... seven sacred circles...loved the allusions here--this was tightly woven Mystical Michael...a poem of revelation... smiles to you m'friend...this spoke to me most profound. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Michael, WOW!! EXCELLENT!!! You draw bold images with these words. I love it. I think it is your best.  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Exceptionally worded Michael So visual, an excellent read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Michael, Eceptional poem, enjoyed every word. You write very well. But then I said that before. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Marvelous sir! But when am I going to get to vote for one of your poems?  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wow. I'm too stunned at the loveliness of this to say much more. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Michael i am stunned! this was brilliantly written. i read it twice and both times took away something different. think i'm going to go and read it again. i so enjoy your work my friend! take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"Eden, the groaning specter of A God given to dream, Creeps and crawls the impassive halls..." WOW! "Stays the Furies, tempts the Fates, And holds Time to a thread." WOW again! I don't want to copy the whole poem over, hun, but this was just dripping with powerful imagery ... well done, I say (and not just cause I have a biased opinion!) Smooches, --Me YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Oh, Keeper of the Tower, watch What hope but lies in wonder! Seven Brothers, bearing gifts, (The Seven laws of Thunder)! Shake the heavens, peel the passion Of this madness-tinged eye. Seven sacred circles and falls The tower from the sky! Shields raised, swords drawn, yet meet The call of aching Sorrow. Defend phantom Yesterday, All hope be to the morrow! Pleasure in the open wound, I readily admit it. Seven Brothers, palms laid bare, I never shall forget it! ------- Michael, this is stunning, powerful and beautifully written... I feel like I repeat these words each time I read your poem, but each time the words seems to be more truer than the previous time...You are a great poet, Michael, and I keenly await your next one... my regards, sudhir. [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Irish Rose, we write from our hearts and as vain as it may sound "I" write to please none other than myself... that others may enjoy my works is flattering but I would never change, i.e. modernize, to please anyone. Janet - hehe, so was this a grade "A" poem and a grade "E"? Serenity, indeed, there was a revelation of sorts here - though I felt the poem a bit obscure myself. Lone Wolf & Tracie ,I thank you for your compliments... Sy, it's been a while - welcome back. Glad you enjoyed. PdV - TY, but so far as voting - pick one of your favorites and I'll throw it out there - otherwise I may never pick one... Amy, that this poem can be taken many different directions I have no doubt - mayhap it was intended that way... hehe Elizabeth, ah heck - words are highly over-rated anyway, me thinks. Kess, wow - did I really get two "wows" from the same poem?... hehe smooches right back at ya!!! sudhir, you compliment touches me in it's sincerity. Thank you all for the kind replies, Michael |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thar' ya are! Whew, had to dig deep fer this'n! Mr. Mike, I just wanted to say that you don't do too bad at these little nursery rhymes. I mean, especially when one considers the extreme disadvantage you have compared to the real poets here... Ok, all kidding aside (had to get that in, haven't been able to rib you enough lately) this is good Mike. First off, I love the internal rhyme scheme. But it's not just that you did it, but that you varied it to the implied rythm of the poem itself. Whoa! Add to that your verbiage. DAMN! I love it when you use a thesaurus!!!  LOL, AND the tac of this poem in general. Of course I relate to many of the indicated feelings, but the power... it's immense! It rams straight into you and bowls you over!And I'll shut up by quoting my favorite part o' this one: Full moon over the Darkness, yet Perceive this bleeder's call -- By mourning Night, by grim delight, Know one shall ne'er be "All". C. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow ... what more can I say after Christopher and all above Michael? I fear I'd have to dig out "my" thesaurus just to find new and wonderful ways to praise your exquisite works. So I'll simply say ... this was exceptional! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW WOW Do I need to repeat it? This is epic...yep, that's the word Michael... K |
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