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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
The night sky is very clear There is a full moon up above I wish that you were near That I could feel your love I seek out the brightest star Shining with all its might I ask to be where you are On this peaceful night Setting all other things aside Nothing would matter but us Swallow a piece of your pride Show a display of trust You know the love we'll make Would be the absolute best A tender display of give and take That could rival all the rest Instead I have to accept That I am here alone All my tears have been wept Now my heart is hard as stone Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LW~ such quiet sadness in this one. i can feel the pain and longing through every word you wrote. i too am experiencing similar feelings on this night. take care m'friend. amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Slashed soul Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 86England |
I really liked this poem Wolf! well thought out and paints a wondeful picture in my mind - edged with the harshness at the end - -Rich- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Amy....That is exactly how I feel. Sorry to hear you feel the same. My thoughts are with you... Rich....Thank you. I knew there just could not be a fluffy ending here. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Yes.....  sigh you made me feel it too.You have read my soul. Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
LW, great work. . .your feelings show very well in this one. . . and I hope that your heart will not turn to stone. . . Excellent poem. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW,...awww, this is killin' me. I love your ability to really express what's going on inside you with your words. This is so sad and I can see you there and OH,...you know what???....hehe...I remembered...don't you have something to look forward to really soon?...If this is still true,..just think of all the things you will be doing and try to smile and think of how wonderful it'll be,...'specially after this. Oh, Please take care of you...and E if ya need/want. *Peace. ~Be thinkin' of you. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Lone Wolf, I can feel the longing within these words... Instead I have to accept That I am here alone All my tears have been wept Now my heart is hard as stone Remember, Tomorrow is a brighter day I'll try to catch you on ICQ tomorrow All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Peppermint....perhaps we have similar souls. Thanks, I am glad when people feel the emotions behind the words. Sven....Thank you, I am not sure if it is stone yet or not, but it sure feels like it at times. Yes, that is how I feel. Wish it could be a reality sometimes. SF....Awe, thanks. My heart just pours out of the pen. Probably the only thing that has kept me sane. Hope to catch up with you online real soon. Jeffrey....Yes, there is much longing. I remember my friend. Hope to get you on ICQ too. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Lone Wolf I don't think your heart is as hard as stone. Because I can read what you post here. I think you can write about sadness like a lot of us can. Nice reflections great poem! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
LOne wolf this poem is filled with such tenderness and sadness that I know these words did not come from a "heart...hard as stone." thanks for sharing, a wonderfully written poem. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ethome...Thank you. Yes, I write sadness and lost love...a lot do. I just do not know how to feel these days. Brian...Thank you for a wonderful reply. I hope it isn't stone. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yeah I know what you mean Lone Wolf cause I too have someone special I would like to be with...sharing a friendship and love and romance..and night after night I find myself sitting alone. I have made some progress...patience is necessary. Hope your dreams come true. James |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very lovely Wolfe! Coco |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
You know how sometimes you hear a song that touches your soul and it feels like it must have been written with you in mind and just knowing that someone understands brings a tear to your eye...thats what your poem did for me. Your emotions are beautifully expressed. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
James...I hope it is worth the wait my friend. As they say Good things come to those who wait. Best of luck!! Coco...Thank you!! Jan...The highest compliment I have ever been given is when someone says that I have touched them in some way with my writing. Thank you very much. I do understand how you feel...these are my feelings. Hope that you feel better soon. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent writing LW. With such sadness you write. Hope things get better. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Eloise....Thank you, I am sure they will. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is great poem. and for its length gives us a sort of wisdom about its role. keep them coming so i can read. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeremiah, I always keep them coming...LOL. Happy to see you like them. Thank you very much. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ This is lovely. Tender and honest ... straight from the heart ... only way to go ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lone Wolf~ I have felt these words.....it's so hard, but you know your heart isn't really hard as stone, or you couldn't write with such emotion. This is very good, I hope your heart heals soon. -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
LW I can feel your hurt and disillusionment in this. Heart of stone? Well perhaps for a time it will harden but a heart such as yours could never stay that way. Hang in there Hon, things are bound to get better |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Very sentimental, very emotional and tender... Regards, sudhir. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marge....Thank you and always from the heart. SEA....Sorry to hear you have felt them. I hope it does too. Thanks. sea_of_okc....Thank you. I know it will not be that way forever. Just feels like that at times. I'll hang in there. Sudhir....Thank you. Emotional to write too. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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