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~*Childhood Lost Senryu*~
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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This is probably not my best, but I'll share it anyways to get opinions  ~*CHILDHOOD LOST SENRYU*~ Summer yesterdays when children played, danced and dreamed Winter's passing time *By Melissa Honeybee* |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You've captured the essence! Wonderful! Denise |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I think it's good, Melissa. You have a talent so keep writing! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Melissa, I too think you have done well with this, a sweet/sad contrast stands out for me. Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has past Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Denise, Elizabeth, Dennis: Thank you so much for the kind replies and for the support as always I'll definately keep writing haikus and senryusTake care, Melissa Honeybee |
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