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I Died a Death
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I Died a Death |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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I Died a Death I died a death but stayed alive In phantoms likeness I survive Alive, yet dead, I walk alone In rooms with walls as cold as stone I lived a life and dreamed a dream And loved the life you lived with me Then in the whisper of a breath You left, and then I died a death Though dead I live, I cannot part From love that lives within my heart Elizabeth Santos |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This brought about such incredibly sorrowful emotions Elizabeth ... you've touched my heart yet again. Best wishes, /Kit |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Elizebeth, very moving, simple yet so concrete. Alive, yet dead, I walk alone In rooms with walls as cold as stone. One can almost hear the ehco of slow footfalls through the chambers of a heart lost in shadow. Excellent read, EWDrake |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Wonderful writing. Love Sy |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Elizabeth, Very powerful poem you have written. And, a very deep love this must have been. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful Elizabeth...melancholy mood capitvated. very sad, I hope you have'nt lost anyone recently. I know that is so traumatic as you describe in your words in this and the title...I Died A Death. Your poet friend..ethome.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you for your comments. This poem was written to mean the saddness you feel after the one you love walks out and leaves you, as happened to me when I was young. I didn't feel alive for a period after that. It has nothing to do with death but was meant to convey grief. Liz Now that I read this poem over, a stronger interpretation could be that the loved one died and left the other lifeless. I can see how it could easily be read that way Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-30-2000).] |
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kalybo New Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 6 |
Incredibly moving. Very well written. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Another powerful piece from you. I do not know how you do it. They seem to come so easy for you and each and every one of them so beautiful and so emotional. Well done Liz. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes, I know this feeling...when love leaves it feels like death, even though the person is not dead. Very well put and the emotional impact comes across in the way you have written it. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The death of love or the death of a loved one produce the same feelings of grief. You've conveyed that well in this, Elizabeth. Denise |
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