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ashley cain Junior Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 30Texas |
Stupid little wannabe sex symbol walks out of a salon Platinum blond hair blowing to and fro wondering where else to go got herself a push-up Bra and mini-skirt at some Slut Shop and wants to show off her Bod knows a good lookin' man with a Cool Hot Rod Typical Teenage Girl tryin' to find a life Well there's a find line between That and what she's doin' Sooner or later she's gonna be screwin' with a man the man with the Cool Hot Rod Let's just say she's gonna be somewhere tonight doin' something that's not wery right BUT HEY! A MAN! THE MAN WITH THE COOL HOT ROD! HE'S MORE IMPORTANT TO HER THAN FINDING GOD! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Interesting, although I think it would be better off in the Adult forum. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Ashley~ This is pretty tame, so this piece should be left in the Open poetry forum. Well said! Although some words, were a little risque, I understand why you felt that you had to use them to prove your point. Isn't it a shame that women, especially teenage girls go to such great lengths to find love or beauty. I absolutely loved the last lines: "But hey! A man! The man with the cool hot rod He's more important to her than finding God" This says so much, I am sure that even God himself is wondering this as he is shaking his head at some of us women. Excellent piece! I wonder if Brian and I have started something with our poetry?  If so, great, we all need to talk about this important issue and the issues related to it. If you have time, please read: "Candy Heart" by Brian Madden "Maybelline Eyes" and "Prisoner" By Me Take care, Melissa Honeybee [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I don't know I never liked to tone things done, I perfer to show and see the extremes. but I loved the last line "HE'S MORE IMPORTANT TO HER THAN FINDING GOD!" a great poem, well spoken. and as Melissa said in her response it is an impoertant issue. I have always tries to stay through myself but it sometimes means isolating myself from large groups. But the few friends I have are true and I trust them with my life. anyway again a great poem Ashley. I think we should start a Discussion in philosophy 101 on this topic. In fact... I might as well. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Ashley this was a powerful piece. actually i am glad you didn't tone it down. i think it drives home your point. excellent poem! take care, amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...James |
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