Wanting you ( a try at Haiku)

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Open Poetry #8

Wanting you ( a try at Haiku)

Spirit2572
Junior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 15

0 posted 2000-07-29 07:28 PM

Light touch of your hand,
Reassuring, gentle, firm.
Eyes shining with love.

Voice speaking softly.
Husky with the feel of love.
Whispers in my ear.

Holding you to me,
So close, never letting go.
Wanting you forever.

Spirit2572
Junior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 15

1 posted 2000-07-29 07:32 PM

I just realized the last line has one to many syllables, so here is the correction.

Holding you to me,
So close, never letting go.
Wanting you always

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2000-07-29 11:55 PM

Spirit~
And a lovely job you did on these beauties.

I love the simplicity of Haiku.

These are actually considered Senryu's ...
but the form is intact and the beauty
of your words is what matters most.

Hope to see more.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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