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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2000-07-29 06:27 AM

Dark within the midnight dreaming
Nightmares ride upon me screaming
Waking, waking, waking once more,
From horrors of the night steaming
To reality outside my chamber door,
Worst ever than my worst of dreaming.
Reality, really the life I deplore.

What wakes him,
The crash of trash discarded,
Pieces lost,
Others tossed,
Thundering aluminum,
The worker,
And passers,
Keep alone eyes diverted
From shadows
And windows,
From the trash that was human.
He’s awake,
What will reality take?

Gloom

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

1 posted 2000-07-29 06:44 AM

Gloom~
This is great to read, very interesting.
Imagery portrayed well
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2000-07-29 08:01 AM

This started out very PO-etic...if you get my drift! Ah cheers to us who do NOT live in the eternal confines of city's life!

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2000-07-29 05:00 PM

Professor~
Very real is the clatter from your pen -
You've captured the realism well.

'The crash of trash discarded,
Pieces lost,
Others tossed,'

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

juliet_2u
Senior Member

since 2000-07-23

Posts 1125
North Carolina

4 posted 2000-07-29 05:33 PM

Professor, I really enjoyed this read. Very well done. Best wishes, Juls

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2000-07-29 05:39 PM

Thank you all,
tracie66
Sunshine
Marge Tindal
juliet_2u

I am pleased you like my meager words
which I arrange in my manner of poetry.
Poetic images via words are all I have to offer, it is nice to have them well recieved.

Gloom

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

6 posted 2000-07-29 07:55 PM

psssssst..gloom...i before e except after c...and before other's jump on me...we are friends...and he should use spellcheck more often...in the "receiving" end
~~softly laffin'
Me

byw..great poem

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