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This lonely place
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This lonely place |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia 
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I've fallen into a deep hole There is darkness...no light The darkness seeps in deep into my soul I scream Scream yet noone hears noone I feel fear Fear is what brought me here in the first place This place of silence I've fallen from grace Noone can save me now Because noone can hear I've fallen...into the depth of despair The depth of my despair is a lonely place Just silence and darkness Just a void in a piece of lonely space Darkness falls over me Like a blanket Covering me whole Covering my spirit, my heart, my soul I'm empty now I'm all alone In the darkness I lie In the darkness I cry Still noone hears I'm all alone with my fears Alone in the dark lying Alone in the dark crying |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Please don't get too depressed.... you are a very good poet and there is work to be done. Remove that blanket and take out the pen, sign yourself in...it's important! take care......ethome.. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
An interesting read, A chaotic delving into darkness, of which I don't dread, but my blanket is starkness, a void. enjoyed the feel of your words. Gloom |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
ethome~ Thanks...your words are truly a comfort appreciation is given Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Gloom~ So sorry you jumped right on in when I wasn't looking. Thanks for your comments, glad you enjoyed. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MyTracieFriend~ Very different style from my little friend. The dark would not consume you, for your light of kindness shines. Depth here in this piece from you. What a sheer joy to see you grow in your writing. Big ole' hugs to you this morn. Love ya', gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
not really alone in that lonely place...psst...I'm over here...and Hugs to you miss tracie-- |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
The darkness is a lonely place my friend. . . but your light will shine like the sun. . . to help you see your way. . . Excellent writing my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Tracy66, I can hear you in this poem that you have written, I can listen, as you speak. Thank you for sharing. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
Your words take me back in time. Depression can be a good thing...sometimes...for a little while. As long as you've still got control over that blanket! "When the walls close in around you, When all those about you doubt you, When the world can live without you, Get a grip get a grip and keep it." -H.R. Tony the ones who don't do anything are always the ones who try to put you down - Henry Rollins |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Wow..I'm sorry, so glad you cannot see my tears. God I really must be depressed as all your beautiful and loving comments made me cry and I thank all of you for your uplifting words. I hate when I get like this but it will pass. Thanks Marge~ Serenity~ Sven~ Bill~ Tony~  Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Tracie, I know exactly how you feel , or at least what this poem says anyway  Hope things get better very soon |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jeffrey thanks hon  Tracie~ Tis all better Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow straight from postive to being depressed..I hope all is well with you....the poem is good.....You did good work...now chin up....whoever made you feel depressed forget about it!! Move on.....No one deserves to feel this way!!! Julie :) |
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