Open Poetry #8 |
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Introspection |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State ![]() |
Spinning out of control Into the wall I crashed Breaking me to pieces All hope forever dashed In pieces I blow about Twirling in the breeze Floating with out direction Falling into the seas Drowning in confusion My mind in disarray Emotions suffocate me My sanity begins to fray Illusions fill my head Intricate thoughts surreal Trespassing in my dreams Delusions? Or are they real? Suddenly……. The lost pieces of this puzzle- Are carefully put back into place Awakened, from this numbness My eyes caress your sweet face An angel sent to me From way up on high Piercing into my heart Forever holding you nigh Warmth washes over me Strength holds on to me tight Cradled in serene gentle hands Keeping me safe through the night |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Illusions fill my head Intricate thoughts surreal Trespassing in my dreams Delusions? Or are they real? AWESOME! Love it, been there done that! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Whoa,...you had me there for a second. Phew...hehe, so glad that it turned out so nicely. I was holding my breath through the whole first part.....in anticipation...but you caught me in the end. Lovely poem. Much enjoyed. Thank you. *Peace. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-17-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hey Chris... "Awesome, you love it, been there, done that" Being there and doing that is not that awesome, But I know what you meant! ![]() And Spitfire... Sorry, didn't mean to make you turn blue from lack of oxygen! ![]() You OK now? ~Thank you both so much~! ~Sheri |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I too am out of breath after this poem...phew.. frantic and fantastic... need a rest...wonderful poem...phew. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Irie, this is great. . . I love the story that you told here. . . so wonderful. . . Superb. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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aleisha Junior Member
since 2000-05-04
Posts 10 |
Excellent poem Irie. Took my breath away. Another great job my best friend. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
S, this is really nice writing. The expression just grabs you. Glad it had a peaceful ending! Thanks for the e-mail. Congratulations on the new job....send details soon! dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Brian, Sven, Aleisha & Danny... Thanks you all so much for your great comments. I seem to have left a few of you breathless. I'll take that as a good thing! ![]() Didn't mean to leave you out of breath! ![]() Thanks a million to you all! ![]() ~Sheri |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the title and after reading the content I find the entire work smooth and fulfilling. "Warmth washes over me strength holds on to me tight cradled in serene gentle hands -" |
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