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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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Empty glasses drink from empty souls, smoking cigars packed with content. Ah the satisfying smell of a lost dream. The child has grown up and favors the abandonment of childhood games. Adult now, with no room for goals, he surrounds himself with things. A sixteenth century vase here. A rare handmade Indian relic there. And only the best of the trophies are displayed, those defining him as a distinguished member of a some club, who’s name he can’t remember. Now happy in a life that was never his, he smokes his cigar, takes a shot of brandy, and jumps from the twenty-seventh floor of his successful executive high-rise apartment < !signature--> Just an effigy to be disgraced, to be defaced. Your need for me has been replaced. [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 07-29-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOW...this packs a punch...and how very honestly you have penned this...It's not what we have.....it's what we give from the heart..atleast in my opinion  Great writing~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Excellent!!! Very well done! Reminded me of "Richard Corey"... one of my favorite poems... your writing is succinct and effective |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thanks to the both of you. I am glad that you enjoyed this. Remember it is not what you have, it's what you give. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your "ending" here took me by surprise, I'll admit, as I thought I knew where this was going. A striking, solemn piece of writing. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
Man I didn't see that one coming. You pulled this off so well. I saw it happen. Tony |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Effigy, oh, the trappings of success (someone put a snare in my tracks) ... cool piece ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Well I'm glad to see that I am still able to pul one over on some people still. Just a little trick ending. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Empty glasses drink from empty souls, well.....this certainly makes one think... ~~softly smiling Maureen |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
"And Richard Corey one calm summer night went home and put a bullet through his head'. -------------------- Also reminded me of Richard Corey, which is one of my favorites as well. This is excellent and so true of the world today. Great Job! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
Somebody's been reading "Richard Cory". Nice work. The first line is awesome. |
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