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ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
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0 posted 2000-07-27 09:02 PM


the new poet's lament ...

take your gifts and your dreams
send them to Mars or Saturn's rings
push the words, like newspaper print
on to the screen without a wince

left for hungry follower's to eat
just to finish one, then a repeat
don't stop to make any lasting sense
keep swallowing every letter's (in)tense

fill your head 'til it explodes
fill your bellies to look like toads
spew it back out in a garbled mess
does it look like words, do confess?

a little self-serving never to hurt
any reader's a victim, never alert
congest your thoughts 'til eyes turn red
choke your senses 'til you turn dead

just a warning to those who be new
any word's called a phrase -- what abuse
ponder your lines like a lion on prey
think long and hard on what you say


M.A. Miller
07.27.00

(Again, this more for myself as a reminder not to just push words out the door without THINKING first ...)


My calling before me, let quill be my offering;
For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive.

M.A.


© Copyright 2000 ma miller - All Rights Reserved
deb
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 44
Reading, Pa., USA
1 posted 2000-07-27 09:55 PM


I second that! One reason I am always apprehensive about posting my "poetry!"

deb

Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
2 posted 2000-07-28 10:25 AM


MA....
      Yes.....we all agree, and I thought
      this really hit the point..(one that
      I try to keep in mind, most of the
      time!!)
           Anyway, this was funny and
           is a gentle reminder to all
           of us, I think!
                            Well Said!!!!!



~~ To Live is to Give ~~


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2000-07-28 10:29 AM


Oh this is too rich!  Well done, my new poet friend!!!  and may I add, thoughful?  LOL to you!!!
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
4 posted 2000-07-28 10:43 AM


Okay another word... Poignant and another profound...

regards my friend,
Sudhir

Rosebud1229
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since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-07-29 12:51 PM


Lament to you or is that damn it! lol but your right were all tend to be sometimes quite contrite but often the sun is bright and gets in our eyes hey wait a minute that's just the gleam from this computer that is suppose to be my tutor. haha..
beowulf_26
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since 1999-06-29
Posts 183

6 posted 2000-07-29 12:56 PM


Great job.  it's funny how you can sit thinking about something and then just find the answer in someone elses work by coincedance.  Thanx for the words.
ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

7 posted 2000-07-29 12:35 PM


thanks all for reassuring me that i'm not the only one who goes through these thought processes  ... thanks again for reading ...
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri
8 posted 2000-07-29 12:40 PM


Aaahh Mark no you are not the only one, and soemdays are worse than others...thanks for the reminder that  this place is a privelege not a right.

never say never

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

9 posted 2000-07-29 12:45 PM


A lighthearted look at poetic accountability, well rendered.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
10 posted 2000-07-29 01:05 PM


I was new here once...I lamented a lot!!    


I am enjoying the responses you're getting!  

Sunshine
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11 posted 2000-07-29 01:38 PM


AHA! Yet another who resists spellcheckitis and grammarroundup because the push to please and print and post is so profoundly prodigious our senses swim in the heady aftermath...

that is until we "click" on to see how it really looks after a response or two and {gasp} see error after error and wince back in shame and humiliation, O the humiliation...and

even if someone said "this is good" you know they saw the horrendous typo peeking out at them and were too, too kind to render what they really thought "use your spellcheck!!!"

Good stuff, MA [no REALLY] and a great reminder to us all!

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


ma miller
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

12 posted 2000-07-30 01:14 AM


many thanks to all above for the responses ... i love Passions and wish only the best for its success and all the great poets here ...
MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
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13 posted 2000-07-30 10:44 AM


oh my  this is the second or third time I saw  someone call you Mark..and all along I was thinking...oh my... laughing here now..won't tell you what I was thinking..names sure can fool one can't they
~~soft smiles
Maureen..by the way..enjoyed your poem as I have all other's  but now this puts a different spin on it and I will have to reread some of them...
Maureen

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