Open Poetry #8 |
The Scent of s Rose Petal |
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The Scent of a Rose Petal The scent of a rose petal is all its own And yet by the breeze it is tenderly blown And each one who breaths it instinctively knows That this is the scent of a beautiful rose The meadow lark sings his own lovely song And nobody dares to attempt sing along Though we see not the bird in the dawn’s early dark His song in the breeze is brought right to our heart The maple turns crimson when autumn arrives It reminds us the winter is soon drawing nigh Though the tree may shed leaves in a place we can’t see The breeze lifts them up and it brings them to me When I am alone in the hour of grief My pain will be shed by a bright crimson leaf And sung by a lark in the manner he knows And carried to you by a sweet fragrant rose The breezes will touch you and brush on your face And circle your heart with a warming embrace My sorrow and grief, the breeze will impart And my friends will come quickly to comfort my heart Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--you seem an endless breeze yourself, your poetry is so swift and sure and sweetly fragrant...I just love this poem, and the last few lines are for tears. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Gracefully written... Liz, I could smell the sweet fragrance oozing out from the rose... and feel with it... so touching... regards, sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yanno... I'm sitting here in a very public place and completely unashamed of the tears on my face... for this poem deserves at least that tribute and its beauty prescribes embarrassment. *S* So very lovely, Elizabeth... and I hope you count me among those friends. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Absolutely beautiful....the imagery and the feeling that you gave in this piece is a gift from your heart to ours.....Thank you so very much~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"When I'm alone in my hour of grief my pain will be shed by a bright crimson leaf and sung by a lark in the manner he knows and carried to you by a sweet fragrant rose." Now that's poetry! I love how you wrote about all those beautiful things describing their characastics so well, then tied it in with the last verses. Excellent work Elizabeth just wonderful |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
again, you've done it again...perfection. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
God bless you and Tony, Elizabeth. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Liz; Such beauty and such grief. My prayers are with you. Love, ellie |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Liz, You certainly are the romantic that you said you were. This is lovely, sweet, and very tender. Goodness, I certainly enjoyed it. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, Come over here to Pennsylvania when you can. I'll send a breeze to get you! Thanks, dear Sudhir Always so gracious, Thank you Suthern, It is so great to hear from you and thank you for your kind words. The breeze will brush your face, my dear Butterfly, Thank you. You are so kind with all your comments Ethome. Thanks so much for your remarks serenity, And you've responded again. Thanks for all the readings and comments Elizabeth, Thank you so much Ellie, Thank you dear and I'll see you real soon. Can't wait Bill, Your words are very warming. Thank you for your kind remarks Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
So very lovely, Elizabeth, I hope you have published a book of your own work, I for one would buy a copy. Darn it all, I just started a poem about fall, really, ain't copying you! When it gets hot like this, I start craving fall. Take care, Corinne |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Elizabeth, This one was so touching my friend. What more can I say that has not been said except that I love this one. Perfect. Wishing you and Tony nothing but the best. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, as always, Elizabeth. My prayers are still with you and Tony. HUGS Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Corinne, Lone Wolf and Denise, Thank you, my friends for your dear compliments. This is what encourages me to write sometimes. Thank you so much Liz |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
What a tender and beautiful piece this is. The imagery is wonderful. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The breezes will touch you and brush on your face And circle your heart with a warming embrace My sorrow and grief, the breeze will impart And my friends will come quickly to comfort my heart Beautiful once again and the last verse is a killer. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Elizabeth, this is so totally beautiful. The beauty in your heart speaks so clearly. What a pleasure to read. Take great care and God bless, Juls |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Sorry I missed this lovely poem. It like all the others has your stamp of genius. Love Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Eloise, Thank you Mark, Glad you loked it Juliet So kind of you to write such lovely comments Sy, Thank you, my dear friend. I think that stamp of genius is misplaced. I've seen it in all of your poetry Liz |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Elizabeth, what tender images, flows well! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you, Toddles, I am an admirer of your wonderful poetry, and appreciate your comments Liz |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hi Ya izzy There's no reason to reply to my responce but I just wanted to let you know how I love "the scent of a rose." But you probably already knew that..! Love and prayers always Dale If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely and comforting thoughts beautifully described...James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dale, Haven't seen you for a while. I know you love the scent of a rose - goes without saying. Thanks for reading James, Thank you for your thoughts Liz |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I love the scent of the rose, nothing else like it. Wonderful, wonderful work, as always. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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