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Cocooned Destiny
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Cocooned Destiny |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Butterfly spreads her wings in mid-acidic spray Many moons inside cocoon should be time to play She’s bitter cold; her frailty offers her no heat She’ll never know imprisoned so if she is complete Butterfly slumber shaking sadly and alone She’s grown up, she’ll survive surely on her own As her legs alight her confines constricting tight Ever so she meekly flails at the chamber’s might Then one day all awashed in mythical sunbeam Butterfly finds the warmth she could never dream She made a stir such that in her cage finally freed Her soul for the butterfly brought out love indeed |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt, Walt, Walt ~ The cocooning is told so artfully in this piece. Reminds me of the fact that we think of the butterfly as a fragile creature ... and yet the struggle is awesome with power. Wonderful, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
man.....that's freakin' cool. Tony |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lovely and transcendental... buttterfly metamorphosis unraveled, demystified with grace... Walt, enjoyed this muchly, regards, sudhir |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this was supposed to be about a butterfly in someones stomach and a kiss that freed it from its confines a cocoon of sorts but i dont think i conveyed it o well not proud but here tiz |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like it! You did a great job sir!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt that point may not have come across to some, but a lot of different meaning can be conveyed through this poem! What I got out of this grabbed me. How alone and cold, and when we're there can't see the day we'll feel the warmth. Then it comes, the toil and struggle that has set us free to feel that warmth again! I thought this was stunningly beautiful Walt! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I agree with Dovie, walt, I may not have read the story you visualized, but it had a message for me...I like it walt! |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Beautifully told Walt! * a burp might have helped us *  I like the way you write everything. Gossamerwings ;) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh I liked this Walt! Your words just flowed so beautifully in this piece. Much enjoyed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
To describe the birth of a butterfly is not an easy feat!! You did well my friend!!  Julie :) |
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