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allan
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On the road

0 posted 2000-07-15 07:02 PM


Peppermint bullets fill my head
And I will walk down to the meadow
It's only Wednesday, midday
I sit and pray and watch the holy cows
They're trying not to notice me...
A heavy rainbow falls again too hard
A spectrum shard shatters my window
Plummets whirling straight into my kettle
And with all this info a planet is going crazy
And I ask politely please...
Is there some easier way to unstich this?
In time
For easter?

© Copyright 2000 Allan Tierney - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
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Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-07-15 07:07 PM


Allan.....

         This is good stuff!! I can almost
   taste the peppermint.
           I like the vivid descriptions..
         it put my imagination to work!!

                more...more...


Your words become music to my soul......



lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
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saarbruecken, Germany
2 posted 2000-07-16 07:21 AM


Allan, this one is really funny! It made me laugh! Especially the holy cows that are trying not to notice you.
And I'm not sure if you can unstitch all that chaos in time for Easter, though ...
I don't understand what's going on in the world either. Does anyone?
BTW, Why white? I had to really strain my goggle eyes to read it  


Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


allan
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3 posted 2000-07-17 01:12 PM


It's not white, it's peach puff!  

ma miller
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4 posted 2000-07-17 02:37 PM


you gotta' fill us in here ... where did this come from? ... i'm scratching my head, wondering what kinda' candy is Allan eating? ... really, what was your motivation here (if you don't mind me asking)?

[This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-17-2000).]

allan
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5 posted 2000-07-18 01:17 PM


Hello MA Miller

That is an excellent Q. Unfortunately difficult to give a good reply. I had suspended my logical functions temporarily here. I had stopped making 'sense' so to speak...  

It's just a daft 'thingy'. I kind of like totally off the wall-ness sometimes, mixed with the surreal, etc.

But that's getting too deep - it's just a bit of fun seeing how far I could twist my brain to make 180° turns! It's pretty terrible and done in about 30 seconds but I thought what the hell let it be...  I should put a warning on any I do like this!

Thanks for posting something to it - it hardly merits it!     

Allan
  

[This message has been edited by allan (edited 07-18-2000).]
Jan
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since 2000-06-14
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6 posted 2000-07-18 01:33 PM


You made me smile, so its definately worth the post.  Thanks, I needed a giggle break!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2000-07-18 01:44 PM


aw...allan, was worth it just for the "peach puff"---now there's a line I may have to steal....
Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
8 posted 2000-07-30 12:43 PM


Hehe, I like this!! ^_^ So off the wall, wacky and.. BRILLIANT.. hehe.. *_^

Hey, a hint.. if someone uses a colour that's hard to read.. like white.. woops, sorry, peach puff, ( ) highlight their poem, so u can read it better.. ^_^

Loved this Allan, thanx 4 da read!



Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu



MMoonchild
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9 posted 2000-07-30 12:54 PM


allan..loved your "peach puff"..and of course your words...you made  me chuckle aloud..although some of these thoughts have me wondering now...
~~softly
Maureen

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2000-07-31 02:27 AM


Y'know...I think I am understanding the peppermint bullets, now allan, and if I'm not, don't tell me, because it FEELS like clarity...
allan
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11 posted 2000-08-01 03:44 PM


O Serenity, now please tell ME...


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