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Lady Love (Repost for submission as per M.T. suggestion)
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Lady Love (Repost for submission as per M.T. suggestion) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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She comes quietly from the daylight she draws up close with fine perfume city sounds fade out of mind when lady love walks into the room. She brings a spell to put you under an old trick you can't refuse hungry hearts beat like thunder when lady love walks into the room. She can glove your best endeavour and she'll melt you with her flame lonely souls can't find each other when lady love plays her game. Dream sailor score yourself a lover the winds of time are blowing through there's adventures to discover when lady love walks into the room. She's got a solid gold St. Christopher she's from the penthouse with a view and every eye will drift to her when lady love walks into the room. Bartender pour the boys a buffer it's another highball afternoon they just can't stay undercover when lady love walks into the room. She's got dancing rosy color she's taking steps on new old shoes so dream sailor score yourself a lover here comes lady love into the room. [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
How vividly this plays in my mind...I can see her, and all those at her feet. never say never |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Ethome, what a picture you have painted of this spectacular lady.Loved it....Juls [This message has been edited by juliet_2u (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Lady love...she's supposed to have a kind heart. I hope she is kind to you!  Gossamerwings ;) |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Oooops, sorry!LOL I meant to say I love your writing and this poem is special. < !signature-->Gossamerwings  came back to vote...thanks! [This message has been edited by Gossamerwings (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula...Juls...and Gossamer.....I appreciate your comments.....this is really supposed to be jazz lyrics....like Al Jarreau would sing...I thought it looked alright as a poem so I submitted it. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
This is a really great poem, I really like this very very visual! God you're good! If I didn't like your style so much I'd be spitting tacks, but I do, so I'm just sit and admire the flow and veiw! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is marvelous, ethome, and would lend well to jazz. What a rhythm! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Fine one and oh-so-true. It takes guts to try to rhyme with St. Christopher! fh |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ This is one remarkable piece of writing, sir. I can only suggest one improvement -  SUBMIT IT ! DARN IT ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Agree with all the above, I really enjoyed the read. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
E.... this was a fine tune... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Bartender pour the boys a buffer it's another highball afternoon they just can't stay undercover when lady love walks into the room. WOW...I loved it all but this part was so cool!..and I'm with Marge...she a smart lady you should listen to her What a great idea you had with this piece! Superb! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
nice approach, ethome ... fav ... so dream sailor score yourself a lover here comes lady love into the room. nice ... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hey wake up!!!! Didn't you hear Marge. She said submit it and I think you better do as she says.LOL This needs my vote but I do need a little help here please...get me that box. Great write my friend. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--I can hear this playing...a wonderful song...and very well done poem! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much every body I don't know how to thank you enough I will open the box thanks again.....especially Marge you sweet girl you... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Just came back to check that little box. And of course read it again. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Alright ! Whoa ! I do crack a mean whip, don't I ? Glad to find my fellow poets so submissive ! LOVE IT ! ET~ Great piece, my friend ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Mark and Marge you are so kind. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome, You are very good, as a matter of fact, even better than that. I am so glad I stopped by to read this poem that you have written. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
your getting really good at submitting lOl this is so awesome E..it rocks.. your poetry always has such great melodics to it.... and your love poems make me sing... superb take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nice, ethome! I enjoyed this! Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Janet you are indeed a sweetheart. Thank you Bill for the kind words. Thank you Denise for taking the time to drop in and read. |
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