Open Poetry #8 |
Rose of Desire |
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Upon the satin pillow case A rose to greet my morn Placed within a crystal vase Tears from heart are torn The good-bye you gave no voice Treasured time now flown away To leave there was no choice You must be on your way Held within your grace Loved beneath the moon Star dust fingers trace Again... never comes too soon Words whispered on a dream Love shared within the night Lips caressing velveteen Dancing silhouettes of light The need turned to addiction Mere embers to blazing fires Ecstasy without restriction Uncover sweet desires Inhale the rosy scent Soft memories come alive Loving you sweet torment Numbed feelings you revive Still your presence fills me Though your mortal form is gone Sadly...how it must be As darkness succumbs to dawn |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
How very lonely this is... never say never |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Beautiful as always BDC! What imaginitive word-pictures!!! (Applause) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You never cease to amaze me... I do so love to read your works. You paint every one with such vividness that I get lost in them.WEll done again my friend. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Applause!!! Surley a standing ovation. ~ As darkness succumbs to dawn ~ Indeed it does my friend God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
You're always worth the read BDC. Love the fifth verse the most. I've been in a love that took me there. lonely and wonderful. Tony [This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Paula* Thank you for reading~ Todd* How sweet...thank you very much~ Mark* Very high praise..**blush** Thank you for your rays of morning sunshine Eagle* Sit down thank you my dear friend..and yes it always does...no matter how dark it is~ Tony* Thank you.....I always enjoy knowing what parts caught someones eye...I must have changed that stanza 50 times...I'm so happy that you liked it~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Butterflies~ This is so painful... but extremely well written... the imagery perfect... and the poem leaves me with a complete feeling of having read a wonderful poem... Many regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
my my my...your poets pen is just on fire my dear ... and me with no muse...*sigh* ... this poem is just awesome SS... felt every line right along with ya... and that 5th verse OH YEA!!! very well written and very emotive poem... love ya jm |
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Richard McDonald Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 29Queensland, Australia |
I am taken aback. The power of this poem hit me very hard. Excellent. Richie! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Butterflies_dont_cry, This is excellent, well done Butterflies. Will be back for more. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, The butterfly is ablaze with life!!! You go!!! The light will come my friend. Hang in there!! WE will see it together . . . soon. You have a greta talent for wrapping these up very neatly. Perfect. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sudhir* Your comments are always appreciated...thank you so much my friend! J.M.* I thought you might like that one Thank you sweet sis...I'm going to pick out a leash for your muse now....... Richie* Many thanks....it's an honor to touch someone with something that I've written...and always amazes me. Bill* Thank you for taking the time to read and for your kindness~ L.W.* "wrapped up neatly"......wish I could do that in my life and not just poetry....lol thank you my friend and YES...WE will! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is beautiful! It has to go back to the top! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ So softly you cascade your thoughts ~ A treat for this heart. 'Lips caressing velveteen Dancing silhouettes of light' Doesn't get much prettier, hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Insect* Awwwwe thanks Marge* You are the goddess of pretty so I'm very touched that you would think so......thank you from the heart~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh Butterflies! This one brought an ache to my chest. You elicit such emotion in your poetry. I absolutely loved this one. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Spirit2572 Junior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 15 |
This poem brought back many memories. Beautifully written. Spirit2572 |
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N2Wishin Junior Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 38 |
If you had a vote button this one would get mine!!! Good Job! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Beautfully written Excelent Liz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
TA* Thank you so much...what kind comments you showered on me today! Spirit2572* Thank you for reading and taking the time to reply, Welcome to Passions! N2Wishin* How nice of you to say Thank you so much~ Liz* Thank you for reading~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Still your presence fills me Though your mortal form is gone. Sadly...how it must be as darkness succumbs to dawn." Beautiful rich thoughts and desires within your lines of poetry. I often wonder why it has to be this way. So many times love is just one way and our ecstasy turns to sadness...is this due to bad selections on our part or is this the nature of love...James |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
BDC Sniff - Sniff Very sad but perfectly penned. You have my vote - can't wait for more. |
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