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I looked back
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I looked back |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Repost I looked back Dry rot ate the steps of wood All the places I had stood. Brambles pad the path and yard Abandon hangs sad facade. Uncaring stared the moon on high Uncertain seemed the wind to sigh And silent trees laid ghostly shade Like painted Halloween brocade. Haphazard hung the cobweb frills From hollow windows empty sills And only sorrow gorged the glean Mocking me in every scene. Dissolved away in simple truth Past relics of my naive youth And queasy load my ducts with tears And heavy grew the weight of years. The past is gone, a sad amen The bitter sweet will not again. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nothing's forever....and you paint a very vivid picture of the effects time has on all things living or inanimate...Click....well done Seymour! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WoW wOw WoW Seymour, This is fabulous... what poetry am I being treated to today... so glad I am here and not anywhere else today... regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another vote for the master Liz |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
What a brilliant discription of the past, present and future. The only thing never to die are our memories. And you bring that to life here. Great work!!!!!!!!!!!1 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Thanks for the well done. Sudhir, Thanks for the WOW's. Elizabeth, Your vote means allot. Sy Oh2beme, Thank you for the great. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I always enjoy reading your stuff, Seymour. Corinne |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
You just took me on a little voyage, Sy. So haunting! The wording was eloquent and the images, so powerful. Lost myself in this one. "Click" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Memory leans back against a tree and the view's not what it used to be. I'm voting for this poignant well written poem, Sy...great work! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne, Thank you so much. Trew, Beautiful comment. Martie, Thanks for th e vote. *L* |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Sy, I commented and voted for this one yesterday but today the comment seems to be gone for some reason. So I'm voting again just in case the first one didn't register. Wonderful poem! fh |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Memories......described beautifuly here.....would make a great country song I think,,,,,  Julie :) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wonderful work, Seymour... but then, I expect no less when I open your poems. *S* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW! Something about this wonderful flowing verse just grabbed me Seymour ... loved this! (click)  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Fred, A friend indeed, thanks. Julie, Enjoyed your remark, thanks. Suthern, I love you too. Kit, Click, click, thank you so much. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (edited 07-30-2000).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I walked with you through cobbled yard memories all are not discard and teared like you I readily admit and will have no more of it... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Uncaring stared the moon on high Uncertain seemed the wind to sigh And silent trees laid ghostly shade Like painted Halloween brocade. Haphazard hung the cobweb frills From hollow windows empty sills And only sorrow gorged the glean Mocking me in every scene. =============================== my my my ... i could eat the rhyme in this baby with a spoon( but id rather use my fingers) oh you do this SO very WELL!!!!!!! awesome poem... as ALWAYS...those last two lines kick poetic behind later-so-very-wise-poet-gator jm |
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