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Sunshine
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0 posted 2000-07-25 09:31 PM


Travel On

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One may not
reach the dawn
save by the path
of the night.

- Kahlil Gibran -
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You cannot see the light my dear
until the dark has made you fear
until the day is so far away
you cannot see the light.

Until the dark has made you fear
until the day is so far away
you cannot see the light
until a voice in dark you hear.

Until the day is so far away
you cannot see the light
until a voice in dark you hear
you cannot see the light quite near

You cannot see the light
until a voice in dark you hear
you cannot see the light quite near
save by the path of the night.

Until a voice in dark you hear
you cannot see the light quite near
save by the path of the night ~
when wrong can suddenly be made right

And now you've reached the dawn.

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
25 July 2000



Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-07-25 09:41 PM


Very true, Karilea!  

Denise

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-07-26 03:49 AM


Karilea,
Is what I see a mirage?  

I can see a billboard saying to me things that are scrolling from down to up.... like the line "you cannot see the light"   moved from 4th to 3rd to 2nd to 1st and then I saw the light line

save by the path of the night ~
when wrong can suddenly be made right

And now you've reached the dawn.


(... well so did the other lines move...)

Now I have reached the dawn... and the morning has come up now after the layers of early twilight, late twilight and dawn...

Amazingly done and very well said...

Your sun shines through ...

regards,
sudhir

P.S. tell me it is not a mirage...   I will just call it a Sunshine Effect


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-07-26 01:56 PM


I agree with sudhir here, this is deceptively simple...a clever arrangement, all in all...very effective, Sunshine...
Sunshine
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4 posted 2000-07-27 09:11 AM


denise, thank you...

Sudhir, I guess you could say it's like looking down a blacktarred road on a hot summer's day...mirage and all...glad you enjoyed this...

Serenity, thank you for coming in to read...

Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-05-23 08:51 PM


oh my!!! You absolutely have to repost this!!!
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