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Foam Lace Wave |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I never heard it ticking, tho at times I tried to catch the movement of the hands... and though I honored her, her tides and seasons, I didn't seem to realize with every phase of wax and wane she touched me gently... prodding on... I never counted my steps impressed upon the dampened shore and yet I cried expressed regret as tide erased in foam lace wave the path I'd walked before... Sometimes the ticking ticking ticking drives me unrelenting, but still I honor her-- better now, with more decorum, for she touched me with a silent hand, and silver paint adorns my hair, and creases line my mouth amused themselves by so much smiling... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this is perfect sen just perfect dont know waht to say but that  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thanks walt...love your work, love your generous replies...I thank you. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
wow...I can only agree with wayoutwalt...this is great. Thanks for the welcome. Tony |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
This is simply beautiful Serenity, an incredible poem, with an outstanding title. Bonnie |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
hi serenity ... water's the theme these days ... great work here ... for she touched me with a silent hand, and silver paint adorns my hair, and creases line my mouth amused themselves by so much smiling ... this is nice ... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
for she touched me with a silent hand, and silver paint adorns my hair, .... Wowing the waves... such a wonderful work... true serenity indeed... regards, sudhir |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
serenity~ Oh, my friend, this is so wonderful! I just love the way this one flows and ebbs across my soul. You have outdone yourself yet again, dear! Love Ya! ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Serenity--This is so beautifully done...thank you for the grace of you. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
yes I agree with all..this matches your name in it's serenity ~~softly enjoying it Maureen |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
The sea of time stands still for none of us... true... well written...erasing our footprints.. read it twice |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
just wanted to say a quick thank you from the tip of my head to the bottom of my sandy feet...especially so to Martie---you actually made me hug myself there...thank you for YOUR graciousness... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and though I honored her, her tides and seasons, I didn't seem to realize with every phase of wax and wane she touched me gently... prodding on... I never counted my steps impressed upon the dampened shore and yet I cried expressed regret as tide erased in foam lace wave the path I'd walked before... ======================= and "she" inspired a most pretty poem in you too me twin... so very lovely no looking back me twin... let the tides and moons carry you ahead.. and remember... we dont grow older... we age like fine wines...  (tho i feel like MD20) LOL love the imagery and wisdom of this graceful beauty me twin... love ya me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Phew...thank you for that wonderful kiss on the cheek!!!lol...I go now to defrag the house...thank you m'twin... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Serenity this is so beautifully done.... I was hooked from beginning to end..flows so smoothly.....wonderful.... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity, This was very touching, thanks for letting me stop by for a read. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Timeless travels erased in the sand. Now I know where they get that sand for the hour glass.LOL Loved the walk on the beach with you. Relaxing read. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
serenity, just wonderful. . . I can almost hear the ocean. . . Superb my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
This is so sweet...I like the line "she touched me with a silent hand"...wonderful work! love & all, -Holly I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...I am very touched by the response to this...you all have my humble gratitude...and now, if I may, allow myself one tiny happy screen dance? Thanks, all... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Moonlit shores spring to mind - aglow with waves of light from you. Lacing my thought with smiles. This is a lovely piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Well done. Great use of words. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I know I read this...and I was sure I posted a reply...shows what I know... Well then..I'll get on with it...this fell beautifully within the pattern of those lacey waves...had a dreamy effect that was very soft, beautiful work~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! This is beyond beautiful and stirring. I love the way you write Melissa~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 08-02-2001).] |
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