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Today's the Day....... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Today's the day I do it, girl - the day I make it through The morning, noon and night without a single thought of you. I know I haven't done it yet, though I've been trying to.... Today's the day I do it, girl - the day I make it through. Today's the day I realize the diner down the street Is just another building - not the place where we would eat. I'll realize the sun will not remind me of your face, The breeze that touches me won't make me think of your embrace. Today the beauty and the fragrance of the garden flowers Won't represent the splendor of the love that once was ours. My mind will finally free itself of memories long since passed And I will break the chains that bind and bid adieu at last. Late afternoon, 'round four o'clock, when all the skies turn gray Will be because it happens - not because you went away. The evening stars that follow will not represent a sign Of irridescent, sparkling love that once was yours and mine. Then late at night beneath the sheets, I promise not to stare At that same spot where you once lay, with hopes to find you there. Today's the day I free myself of all my pain and sorrow And, if I don't succeed......then I will try again tomorrow. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear deer...you always pen the heart so well, and I love you for it! (and Mr. Martie won't mind) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Yikes, a tear jerker, Balladeer! Its awfully hard to erase those memories,isn't it? Corinne |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Balladeer.... Oh, how I liked this one!!!!!! (The last line was perfection in an ending....wish I'd thought of that!!!) Love received is equal to love given! |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
they say there's always tomorrow.... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That's what I needed to round out my day...thanks, 'Deer... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Hope...a wonderful ingredient in your poem. Again, you have penned a great one!  |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
You always write with such depth and meaning, enjoyed muchly |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Wonderful Balladeer! Loved it!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Haven't we all been there, Deer one - Nice work - You make me want to write something...  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
sounds like the day i tried to forget giving birth hehe loved this, michael... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Haven't we all been there, Deer one - Nice work - You make me want to write something... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, You perspire I mean inspire me too. Great one |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I did this once.....but then I realized that I was patting myself on the back for not remembering on the same day...so I guess I didn't not think of him after all  Greatwork as always~ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Uh huh, and today's the day the sun will stop shining, the birds stop singing, and your heart stops beating. I don't think so! Absolutely wonderful poem, and yes...haven't we all been there at some time or another. *hugs* ~H |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderfully written as always! Tomorrow, tomorrow I'll love ya tomorrow, it's only a day away. Oops wrong one!  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
letting go is the hardest thing to do...but there is always tomorrow never say never |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Awwwww ! You're such a sweetheart ... you'll never forget ! Such sentimentality is to be cherished. I cherish you, my talented friend. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
This made me cry. I can't even respond.So I am out of here! Gossamerwings ;) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie...Whew! I'm glad. I admire the man....he's with you. Thank you for your kindness.Corinne..To tell you the truth, I never try. I cherish every one Sunny1...you COULD have thought of it. Just look out your window! Thank you, miss.MMoonchild...so they say. Sometimes they're right! Sunshine....always my pleasure to do so Thank you very muchdeVine one...hope is always a special ingredient, as you are with regard to Passions! Thank you, my friend Jeffrey...sometimes it does get deep! Glad you enjoyed.... Tennessee...I'm very glad you loved it...and, yes, I would take you as you are Nan...You BETTER write something! Your legions of fans (me included) are getting restless!  Doreen...giving birth...creating birth..it's all unforgettable! Thank you, sweet person.Nan...Alright already!!!! I heard you!!!!! Sy...no sweat, my pal Butterflies...that's right! If you remember that you're not remembering then you're really remembering!! Whoa! I'm getting dizzy! X angel...and I'm sure you've been on the other end, too....the unforgettable woman Thank you, heather Dovey...you are certifiably cookoo!! I love it Paula...you are so right. Thank you for reading... Marge...I have so few memories to forget! Hint! Hint! (is it working?) I had a memory to forget once but I forgot it Thank you for calling me semi-mental gossamerwings....Come back! I have Kleenix! Seriously, thank you for allowing my poetry to move you...... [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 07-25-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Balladeer my man, You are trully a poet, awesome, perfect, WOW, wonderful, beautiful, actually im at a loss for words. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is nothing unusual It's typically perfect! Liz |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is elegant, simply elegant, the pain is so understated that it radiates.....great writing...makes for wednesday morning tears...whew...... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
do you know how absolutely adorable and tender and sweet this poem is ... I just had to smile while reading it, even though its emotions laced with melancholy its wisdom and grace just spoke of you so perfectly... and thus... the smile comes from the thought of you... (ohhowilovewhenyouwritelikethis) later-sweet-wise-poet-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Yeah Deer... We forget them every day don't we? Kudos bard |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
absolutely wonderful in every aspect!! |
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JohnDLeclare Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43 |
There is always a fresh start I've been married to mine for 18 wonderful years.John D LeClare |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Forgetting to forget seems to be the hardest part of all of this. Try as we might it always seems to come back when we think we are doing so well. Absolutely wonderful write. I applaud you once more. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And here I thought you were going to show me the way... instead I must continue to wander aimlessly in the land of might have beens. *S* Ah, well... oblivion will have to wait... for torment sure does inspire you to greatness! *G* Loved it, Deer one! |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Funny how everything is a reminder when we need it the least. Hmm... You are an isnpiration. I do enjoy your poetry; this style, in particular! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Such sad and true words with such a great flow. This one I truly enjoyed. Kathleen |
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inyourdreams Junior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 10paradise |
I tried this, too, but I wasn't very successful. I've read quite a few of yours and you are a very good poet. I put this one in my library to read again. Do you have a website with your poetry? I would like to view it, if you do. If you see this comment, could you E-mail me with a link to your website if you have one? Thank you. *dream on, baby, dream on me* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I knew I came back here for a reason today |
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