Open Poetry #8 |
Painted Red |
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I was young A little boy Wandering down a winding road Leading to a house A manor Painted red Emanating fortitude and solidity Words I didn’t know Feelings to come with time On the porch I stood before A massive looming door The paint was wet do not touch But a child could not ignore My fingers slid across the grain Recoiled with a phantom pain I saw crimson dripping steady Dripping blood from wooden vein I knew this house it had to be My place of birth though lost to me Wherein walls now held fast Were mortar, dust, and dying tree? Wrecking ball, foundation crack Untouched for hands hold intact Strong and beating rhythmically From blood off Savior’s back I tried with rapture to impart The wisdom imbued with a start Cleanse the soul and be surprised What's found in search of heart [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 07-25-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walt, this is different from your usual.. There's a lot of depth here! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very deep with some great images! Extremely well done, I enjoyed it greatly. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is so intense Walt...loved the imagery of the manor, and meeting of one's self and immortality...and creator, I am in awe, and proud to be president, of The way-out-walt fan club... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
See Walteee - see what searching the heart can do... This is awesome...beautiful...I am proud of you, and that writer's heart in you. Hugs K |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, Walt, love the imagery here.. blood from wooden vein.... the Manor painted red..... Were mortar, dust, and dying tree?..... From blood off Savior’s back.... Wonderful!! Well done. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you guys for takin time to read this one yuh a lil different from ole me |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
My fingers slid across the grain Recoiled with a phantom pain I saw crimson dripping steady Dripping blood from wooden vein Whew...I loved this verse..and the "all" of it thank you Walt ~~softly Maureen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
W.O.W.* This is deep and powerful writing, very much enjoyed! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt reach around there and give yourself a pat on the back, for a job well done! This is great Walt! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks guys my heart has Jesus in it to keep the walls from collapsing!! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Well done Just an effigy to be disgraced, to be defaced. Your need for me has been replaced. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done walt - I enjoyed this piece a lot... You're quite versatile, my friend.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
One word PROFOUND Two words put together Thought-provoking Walt, this means two separated words: Very Enjoyable. regards, sudhir |
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