Open Poetry #8 |
in the footprints of a breeze |
X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
the breeze left footprints across the sand like a trail of fine lace it tip-toed over grass dotted dunes swirled through beach plums and came to rest in my ears like a forgotten memory whispering of stolen, star-lit kisses and slow dances on a moon-lit floor murmuring of far-off dreams and an angel's sigh the breeze moved on like an impatient child to lift and frolic among the clouds leaving me earthbound swept up in the footprints of a breeze though in my heart I soared too aloft in crystal skies "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent imagery and offering lots of hope... In summary, a wonderful poem... regards, sudhir |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Excellent poem, fine choice of words.!!!! Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is lovely!!! The title is fantastic too! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Xangel, nobody passes wind like you! This is beautiful, really!!!! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Hehehe I have a confession to make, I stole the idea for this poem from a Home Decor magazine! In an article about Eyelet of all things! Odd where inspiration for poems come from isn't it? And thanks so much for the replies ya'll, I had hoped I was conveying the image well enough so the reader could FEEL being there along with me ~H |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
mmmmmm! Unfold those Angel wings of yours and fly Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
x angel i likes this alot i do you are talented much my friend |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
oohhhh, I love the images in this..... very well done.... |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
What a scene you've brushed with your pen Heather, this is absolutely wonderful! Bonnie |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
yeah H .. the image of an eyelet!! ~shaking my head~ comes thro splendidly ... are you feeling ok dear? ... seriously .. keep reading Home Decor is my recommendation it seems to be good for you ...... P |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
yeah H .. the image of an eyelet!! ~shaking my head~ comes thro splendidly ... are you feeling ok dear? ... seriously .. keep reading Home Decor is my recommendation it seems to be good for you ...... P |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Neato..... I love footprints and flying aloft in crystal skies... Can I come along???.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is a very deep, creative poem, shows your talent. I loved it! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderful Heather...really nice work... K "He looked across the silky surface of the Severn, and remembered that it was a famously difficult river with fierce tides..."from 'Jack Maggs' |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
XAngel~ This is lovely. I like this really soft side of your writing. Loved the info on the inspiration. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
soft side of my work huh? Is that sorta like eggs over easy? *wink* kidding Thanks ya'll, and now I better get ready for Long John and Lorelei who are coming anytime now! ~H |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I know what you mean, like on a day when there is a light breeze on the air and you're not taking much notice, when all of a sudden a stronger breeze comes up and affects you directly it seems. It's almost like you are connected to it and it gives a you a lift and you're glad to be alive to take in the freshness of it...My God I'm going on so..great poem by the way....ethome. |
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JohnDLeclare Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 43 |
Makes me think of the sea shore where I went as a child John D LeClare |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
that's zactly what I mean ethome! You get the cookie! thanks all (again) you're too sweet ~Heather |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
X Angel, this was very nice took me away it did.... these lines are my fav... whispering of stolen, star-lit kisses and slow dances on a moon-lit floor they really swept me up in a wishful moment. Parker |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
i want to go too |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Heather~ Know what I loved about this : 'the breeze left footprints across the sand like a trail of fine lace it tip-toed over grass dotted dunes swirled through beach plums and came to rest in my ears like a forgotten memory whispering of stolen, star-lit kisses and slow dances on a moon-lit floor murmuring of far-off dreams and an angel's sigh the breeze moved on like an impatient child to lift and frolic among the clouds leaving me earthbound swept up in the footprints of a breeze though in my heart I soared too aloft in crystal skies' EVERYTHING !!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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