Open Poetry #8 |
Poetic Crap |
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Dedicated to critics who like to throw their egos around (not anyone at Passions, of course!). Poetic Crap A quick review dashed by dots, quoting Tennyson the deed done on to the next, a learned skill tearing up egos. Smash this line, the truncation, lack of originality smacking of plagiarism this familiar title? Don’t take it personally! Here to help, you see! Take up knitting my dear, forget all about poetry. Some damned critiques Just dole it out Like so much Poetic Crap. © 2000 CM Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-14-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
its the truth durnit its all the critiques fault yuh they can ruin dreams hopes, yearing desires, aspirations and redundencies... i love it yuh good diggin up on the truth reporter corinne yuh |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wonderful poem Corinne. I am getting ready to send off my poetry manuscript to publishers and eagerly awaiting the rejection letters. I think I might them this time. LOL. a great poem, honestly ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating ----- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
So damn true, and so well penned by you, Corinne... .......... out from the blue, a bolt, he gave a wicked jolt, a critic disguised as a poet, made mince-meat out of my words, he ate!!! ........... enjoyed this one... regards, sudhir. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great expession and display of anger! Nathan |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
I enjoyed this. I got a critique from a well-known man(teacher and critic) on 6 of my poems.Critique was ok until I asked him some question's about poetry. Hmmmm, he couldn't answer and then sent me some of his poetry to illustrate what he meant in critique.Not related point at all.I wonder if he was a good instructor! Thanks.Good poem. MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, I love you! Your Lady June*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Saw the title...saw the author...couldn't believe what I saw...had to come in, smile awhile, and in me a little voice said "awhhh!" "Poetic penchant in Passion's pen does not meet with red-lined zen, so take away your churlish remark so that I may still want to embark on the truth of word that's in my soul, for by God I'll speak till I grow old and in my golden days I'll voice that Passions is my place of choice!" Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes! so true. Who are they to judge? Who appoints them? They like to gather their opinions together in dark rooms of depression. Let them go criticize the special olympics and see how they do! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL.... I once indulged myself of a "critiquing"... in a place far, far away from Passions Place... They had only three things to say to me - (1) You seem to have a good command of poetic format - (2) You should get rid of your archaic language - and (3) Stop using those silly word plays... It seemed to me that to do as they suggested would make me totally generic - #2 and #3 are pretty much my signature, don't ya think??? I said "Thanks for your input"... and went on my merry way - using archaic vocabulary and lots of puntry.... |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh... btw... I like all your "Poetic Crap"... |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Yes.... this is poetic crap at its finest. You go get em Corinne. When it comes to crap, we got em all beat. I hope everybody understands that I love this piece, and if ya don't, well crap... Parker |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Just spend all your time at Passions and don't even bother with that other place anymore. Who needs it? Critics like that aren't worthy to read your stuff. Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Aw...allow me this bit of trite... YOU GO GIRL!!!~ Thank you much! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you for your great comments, Walt, Brain, Sudhir, Nate, Magnolia Blue, Sunshine, Ethome, Nan, Parker, Denise and Serenity. This poem is a bit indulgent, but saw some folks really take a fellow poet apart after I had recommended the site to him, and I felt just awful about it, soooo, had to express it, right??? thanks again, Corinne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ LET ME AT 'EM ! Critics ... Aren't they the prune pits ? Worth about what you'd pay for their 'offerings' ..... ZILCH ! My friend, you've a way with the 'expression'. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Corrine I hear Ya expressed yourself loud and clear, way to go girl TC~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wow Corinne ... wonderful poem! Please don't even tell me where these other places are! I'm almost in tears just thinking about it ... geez, it took me a long time to get the courage to come here to post at Passions ... I can't imagine how I'd have felt if my first experience posting someplace was as harsh as some sound. Thank goodness for this place ... I'll not wander anywhere else ... too scared! Best wishes, /Kit |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you've been hanging out at the scroll, i see... LOL not funny, really your poem is right on the money, m'dear i'll make a comment over there, too |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
you go, poet! One thing, though. In S4, L3-L5, could you try to give us a better picture of how you feel? LOL Rick |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Marge! Yeah, pompous, uptight, smarter-than-thou so-and-sos they are! Thanks, Tracie! Yes, Kit, it is scary. But the more you post in different places, the more feedback you get (in most forums). Some people will love your poems while others will rip them apart. The only thing that really matters is whether you like what you've written. Doreen, no, but should I take a peek? Thanks, RAM, I'll try to be more explicit next time, Mr. Critic! LOL Corinne |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
ummm Corinne .. I hope it wasn't our own warm loveable little den in CA? p oops ..just seen your opening remarks .. well still ..a lot of what you said rang true .. [This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 07-22-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting thoughts Corinne...my first poem was posted in critical analysis and it was a very humbling experience to be told that I didn't really know anything about writing poetry...I already knew that anyway..so no suprise...but I was hoping for a little encouragement. Then I tried OP 4 and it was much better...I received some nice comments...I was much happier and continued to write and I believe I have improved...the critics would still love to pick me apart but they would have to agree that I have improved...anyway I believe that. I suppose we are critiqued each time we write depending upon the number of hits we receive...not necessarily upon excellence...but style and content...James |
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