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With One Word [in memory of my 3000th post]
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With One Word [in memory of my 3000th post] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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With One Word With one word, and purely put, foremost and there, go I, while one word, now here’s a clue ~ for I cannot perform without you. Then here is where I fetch a word and yet another word or two; and soon with my baton in hand, a duet I shall play with you. Straight away I nod, to begin the dance, and you shall bring a friend, or more, then soon and perhaps a swift romance will begin on this wordy dance floor. For in this parlor we shall seek words of passion to render us weak, those words which like illusion speaks, and with help, and perhaps some chic, we will dance, you and I to words of chance, you and I, to words of romance, you and I, with words of passion, to cause a sigh… now under candelabra, arm in arm, a masquerade of wit and eyes ~ softly, softly, I say to you, where thou words go, go you and I.  14 June 2000 ©KRJ Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
now under candelabra, arm in arm, a masquerade of wit and eyes ~ softly, softly, I say to you, where thou words go, go you and I. a wonderful poem...really lovely.....and amazing. Straight away I nod, to begin the dance, and you shall bring a friend, or more, then soon and perhaps a swift romance will begin on this wordy dance floor. For in this parlor we shall seek words of passion to render us weak, those words which like illusion speaks, and with help, and perhaps some chic, ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating ----- |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Brian, I take it that you approve of this piece, and I thank you for your kind words... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
we will dance, you and I to words of chance, you and I, to words of romance, you and I, with words of passion, to cause a sigh… now under candelabra, arm in arm, a masquerade of wit and eyes ~ softly, softly, I say to you, where thou words go, go you and I. ........... What amazing sentiments, What a nice post to mark the 3000.... congratulations and accolades, Karilea.... Regards, Sudhir |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir I curtsy, kind sir, in silken sheen, as you stand there, tall and lean, then I'll your arm take, and enter the dance... speak softly sir, your words of romance... I don't know what is in me today, but I am certainly enjoying it! Thanks for the kind comments! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
great sunshine poem for sure i liked iits dreamy feel |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
WOW - [that's an acronym for you, Walt...] I certainly appreciate your reading, and yes, I was going for "dreamy"...I often try for that but fail...until someone like you says, yup, yuh, y'didit! Thanks! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
.. words of passion to render us weak .. Sunshine this poem you've shared is truly sweet!  Coco |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 CONGRATS on your milestone marking post Sun this poem is exceptional... a perfect tribute to let your poetic grace shine. the imagery is exquisite... love that first stanza ... later-sun-gator jm  And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Coco, "sweet" works for me, thank you!... Janet Marie, how kind of thee to come on in and take a spin...thanks for the butterfly comments!... |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Sunshine; Magical and fantasy and fun! Congratulations on 3000! I love this whimsical and lovely poem, I'm waiting for Merlin to enter in the dance! Love, Ellie 02 |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice poem.Enjoyed It. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Yes ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh Sunshine - What a beautiful piece of work. So mystical and full of charm. Great poem in memory of your 3,000th post...Congrats ...Bonnie [This message has been edited by BSC (edited 06-14-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~sunshine, 3000 posts, wow! that in itself is quite an achievement! kudos to you. this piece was excellent! loved each stanza, with its vivid wording and flow. true perfection and dare i say breathtaking. take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Congratulations, Sunshine! Beautiful poem! Denise |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Congratulations on 3000 Sunshine! Wow, what a milestone ... wonderfully mystical and enchanting verse you've penned to celebrate it ... really well done! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-15-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all! It's fun to see what little things will put ink in the pen, hey? Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Man that is so well done and so pretty. "A masquerade of wit and eyes" oh yes, I like that one. Good show! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Ethome...I've not seen your name before, so a hearty WELCOME to Passions!< !signature--> Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-18-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I know I commented earlier Sunshine, but I see this is now a book submission since you first posted ... so a second visit is a must dear poet! Wonderful poem, great choice! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nice choice, Karilea... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kit, Sudhir, thank you! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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SEA
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ this made me see a grand ball room and people swaying together! Love it!! -SEA (vote)Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you, Sea. You caught the image perfectly... Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Belated CONGRATS for your 3000th post!! what a big-hearted gracious host you are...not a proficient poet but may i join you for this wordy dance?  btw,if ur 17-syllable poem is about nature, it is a haiku if ur 17-syllable poem is about anything else(love, words of wisdom, life's lessons, friendship,material things etc etc) then it is a senyru now that u know, write me one senyru...looking 4ward to ur attempt here [This message has been edited by kaile (edited 07-02-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Lovely, Sunshine!!! Really dreamy!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
well done sunshine a most delightfully romantic poem.....Oh and a big CONGRATULATIONS on your 3000th post WOW Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kaile, thank you, and yes, I'll check in and attempt a senyru Lizzie, your words are always a boost, as are yours, ESP! Thank you both so much! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Congrats on your 3000th post Sunshine A truly lovely poem! Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you DA! |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Sunshine - your poetry is ORIGINAL IN EVERY WAY Congratulations and well done Deepak Menon |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look what you've done ~  Thank you! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Every moment of our lives is a dance and you have captured it so well. Thanks for the dance and belated congrats on your 3000th post. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, you are quite welcome for the dance...thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Don't know how I missed this one, it's quiet beautiful, Sunshine, and congradulations on your 3000th post! Corinne |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Congratulations Sunny ... 3000 wow ... I'm not sure whether I can even make it to 1000 ... if I do I hope it will be with a poem that's at least half as lovely as yours Rex |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Goodness, I am overwhelmed today...cannot believe that when this came back up, courtesy of Deepak, that there would continue to be response after response. I am blushing here... thank you everyone, for your kind words and comments. You have no idea how deeply this has affected me. I am very honored, and I owe you all a debt of gratitude. Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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