Open Poetry #8 |
Shipboard Dreamer |
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
“SHIPBOARD DREAMER” I was cruising with the ship at sea, Out on deck watching the sights. The sun came up over the horizon, It’s red, beautiful, and bright. The waves of the sea are so gentle, They rock the ship to and fro. The sunrise is so very pretty, Stunning, as the love we will get to know. The sea is deep and has color, It reminds me of your eyes that are so blue. Everything that is all around me, Reminds me, wholly of you. An island I see in the distance, Beckoning for romance. Palm trees they are whispering, About two lovers who desire a chance. The chance they take is with each other, For they both follow their hearts. They still feel some emptiness inside them, Since they are still apart. I looked out from the highest deck, Staring as the sun sets in the west. A great huge ball of fire, That makes my heart thump in my chest. Evening approaches and out comes the stars, Twinkling up there in the sky. We found yours right over there my love, Isn’t that the one I almost passed by? But fate has not cast us yet aside, As your star became mine too. It shines brightly in the heavens, And it brought me together with you. Bill Charles |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bill.... First of all.....this is a fantastic piece, especially for us sea folk! I'm truly amazed that you posted this at the same time I posted 'Slow Boat'!! Truly spectacular coincidence... or maybe not!!!!!! (My muse has an odd sense of humor!!)< !signature--> ~~~Never say Never!~~~ [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 07-21-2000).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunny, As always, thanks for your kind words. I wrote this on 6/1/00 and looked at it again tonight. Changed a few words and decided to post. Do you remember what they say about coincidence? Hmmmmmmmmm!!!!!!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bill~ A most enjoyable read. 'Evening approaches and out comes the stars, Twinkling up there in the sky. We found yours right over there my love, Isn’t that the one I almost passed by?' Keep your eyes on that star. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Starlight, starbright remind me to read more of Bill Charles tonight! Well done! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I love the title and the theme And on top of that I'm a dreamer This one was a hit with me! Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marge, Thank you for stopping by to read my poem, and for your comment. Sunshine, Thank you for your comments. To know that someone would take the time and read one of my poems is very exhilerating. Thanks agaim Elizabeth, I'm so glad that you stopped by to read and comment on this poem that I have written. Thank you so much. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, the likenesses you've employed here are picturesque. Lovely comparisons. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Claire, Thanks for reading the poems that I write and for your very nice comments. I appreciate every one of them. |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Bill Nicely written. You can almost feel yourself on the deck of the ship with you. Hope you weren't alone on that deck. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ddgoose, Thanks so much for coming by again. And thank you for your kind comments. And No, I was not alone on that deck, a pretty lady there, I might add. |
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