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| Open Poetry #8 |
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where levee breaks ... (a serenity/m.a. collaboration) |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
where levee breaks ... rivers flow eternal into delta's waiting mouth love's slow current overwhelms my flow south unto the rushes I sacrifice my will relentless hunger remains unfulfilled of ocean's deep, the mysteries I write but love's deeper well clinches tight and oh inept this riverine to contain the tide of lusting need the play of surf upon wanton lips foamed surge sprays as tide doth rip from mountain's ice, to sea asunder joined joyful in the roar of thunder be damned the living in its wake accursed, dwell where levee breaks waters of love, forever swift our consummation, now adrift serenity and M.A. Miller 07.21.00 [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-21-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ooh I love this... you two rhyme divine together.. very cool poem.... enjoyed the building rush of emotions with the water metaphors... excellent collaboration jm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is very well done, you two...I say bravo!! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Loved the flow of the poem,, quiet beginning but a thunderous finish Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
serenity... if you don't mind, i'd like to pull this into my manuscript ... of course with your full accreditation ... Seems people like the "flow" ... i did too ... reads nice, with rhythm and rhyme ... thanks for the effort ... your words tempered a more lusty direction for the piece and titled it, as well ... well done. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
a wonderful team effort guys this one flowed effortlessly. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mind? Of course not...I thank you graciously (I hope) it was a joy to do, you made it easy...thanks again, me new-found friend...rhymin' all the time, I am...now just where is that Dr. Freud? Thanks all....me loves the forum...durn-near to death...I admit it..lol |
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