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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
When was the last time, When you kissed me, When was the last time, When you missed me, This time, I'm gonna make it, When I come to you at night, I will make you To sing a song, Let's sing for the last time, When we're here, For the the good times, We can laugh And scream aloud, Calling eachother's name, And the things will be the same, The things we used to say, Will be right between you and me, When was the time You say you love me, When the time came Between love and us, When the time came between Love and us, When there was love, Love surrounded us, Tell me, When was the last time When you kissed me, When was the last time, When you say you really love me, When was the last time, When you gave me love, You never said how much you really love me, Tell me, When was the last time, |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Great poem. Makes me think about realtionships and how to keep the flame going. If I can suggest something.. end the last night with a question mark at the end rather than a period. Good poem Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
vandana, I'm always amazed at the way that you can just pour yourself out in these. . . Excellent my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
VanDana~ I like this so much. One can 'feel' the question ... and that is a good thing ! 'When was the last time ?' Oh, I like that line. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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