Open Poetry #8 |
Don't have a title help me please |
Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
Pleae help me with a title and tell what you think of it. Heres two title i came up with pick from this "Why can't i just see" or "Another typical man" I love him so I dont wanna let go He's been there for me Why cant i just see Everyday is the same I have no one to blame What did i do wrong To make him stay gone so long Why cant I just see Hes no longer here for me I loved him to death But he took mu last breath I just dont wanna think and I can! Hes just another typical MAN! bye 4 now Silent |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I would simply call this "Why" I gave my everything to you And you threw it to the wind Slowly I pick up the pieces Wondering if my heart will mend A new day will dawn Where I'll find love true Then I'll be set free From the pain inflicted by you It's never easy to let one go that you love. But the sooner you do, the less pain you'll endure! Well expressed SS! ~Sheri |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I llke the sentiments here....are all guys like this? Perhaps the wrong one for you...need to find one who accepts you and thinks you are special...not always easy to do....some guys aren't ready to commit until months and years have gone by...so it requires patience and the ability to know when to move on and try another. I suggest "Last Breath" for a title. James |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Quite emotional thoughts you've penned Silent Soul ... I really liked Jame's suggestion above for a title! Well done. Best wishes, /Kit |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Nice poem, I'd call it ' Last loves Loss ' . As no one benifits from the situation you are describing and two people spliting up is generaly a loss to love itself and the peace that surrounds us . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very beautiful poem, I believe I would call it---- This can't be Love ------ |
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