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Do You Remember
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Do You Remember |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“DO YOU REMEMBER” My lady, will you meet me tomorrow, at dawn. In “Glockamora”, the most romantic place we both know? We met there for the very first time, Remember, though it seems like ages ago? I will be waiting in the early morning of the day, Before the mist starts lifting from the pond. The green forest will be so quiet, I’ll be listening for you, just as the fairy waves her wand. The enchanted bridge that we knew once before, You know - the one that crosses the stream? The stream that flows through the valley, That brought us closer to our dreams. When I see you standing there in the morning light, Wearing a lily-white dress just for me. I would gently and firmly take your hand in mine, And walk with you by the pond so serene. I would gaze at you with my gentle blue eyes, And cherish you as you smiled. Watching the gentleness of your face, Looking like a mother’s child. While you stood there in the misty dawn, With the breeze blowing through your hair. I would slowly turn and face you, And kiss your soft ruby red lips, if I dare. I would hold you ever so gently, In my arms and softly say in your ear. How very happy you make me, And how much I have missed you, my dear. And again I would whisper to you, about the first time we met, On the enchanted bridge that crosses the stream, You know - the one that flows through the valley, Filling us full with our dreams. And then I ask my lady, will you meet me tomorrow, at dawn, In “Glockamora”, the most romantic place we both know? We met there for the very first time, Remember, though it seems like ages ago? Bill Charles |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Well, Bill.... This one took my heart, my vote and whatever else it wants!! This is truly magical, and that's what did it to me, the enchanted bridge, the mist on the pond, the fairy's wand..... Very enchanting, Bill, and very, very good!!!! ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunny1, I am so glad that you were here when I posted this and you were able to read it before you left. Your comments are like magic to my fingers, as I type away on these keys. I would love to have a place in the mountains and just write my heart away. Maybe soon! Thanks Sunny. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bill~ 'I will be waiting in the early morning of the day, Before the mist starts lifting from the pond.' My favorite line ... I can see the lifting mist. Lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Sigh ... just wonderful Bill! Sweet, tender and oh so lovely ... beautifully penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marge Tindal Thanks for the sweet words. I appreciate your reply to this poem. Kit McCallum, Thank you ever so much for these kind words about this writing that I have done. I loved writing it. Thank you again. |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
What a rich poem! You got me from the first stanza. I loved the repetition and the detail was incredible. Just a great, great piece! Well done! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Trew, I thank you for your kind words. It's always appreciated and welcomed. Thanks again. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh wow. Does your wife know how talented you are?  Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Tender and very full of promise. I love the imagery you have created with this. Great piece. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sunshine, I blush with delight with your comments. To answer, maybe - maybe not, but it is my heart that teases me to write, until perhaps she or someone will. Thanks for coming by and reading my poem. Mark Bohannan, Thank you again for coming by to read one of my poems. Your comments are always appreciated. |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
BC Nicely written. I feel like I am on the bridge waiting for you. Inspirational. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Gosh Bill...that has a nice run to it and is so full of beautiful reminiscence. The pleasantries of the past come haunting the heart. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Had to come back to vote......getting forgetful I guess.... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi ddgoose, All I can say is, if you're on the bridge waiting, perhaps I'll be on the otherside. Thank you for your comments, and welcome to Passions. ethome, I welcome your comments at any time. Thanks for taking the time once again to read one of my favorites that I have put together. Oh ethome, Thank you very much for voting for this one. It's also my mom's favorite. Thanks again. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very smooth...I like the way the poem kept building as you added new information...James |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi jmlee12345, Your comments are always welcome to me. Thanks again for coming by. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW Bill Charles... I bow down in respect, worshipping the beauty of this poem... Many regards, sudhir |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is an exellent poem. You are very talented. You paint a beutiful scene here The enchanted bridge that we knew once before, You know - the one that crosses the stream? The stream that flows through the valley, That brought us closer to our dreams ~MY favorite Thnks for sharing, IsGona |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Bill, There must be something about bridges over streams that attract romantic poets, and these vereses are truly romantic and tender, such a wonderful combination. A superb poem, in every way From a fellow romantic Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
IsGona, Thank you for your gracious comments, as this poem is one of my favorites, mom's too! Thanks for coming by and please do so again. Hi Elizabeth, You are too kind, and yes, I love romantic bridges over quiet streams, meeting someone special there, oh yes. A romantic I am, and it's hopeless, but I love it just the same. Thanks once again for coming by, hope to see you again. And it's nice to know that there's other romantics out there to meet. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What a tender heart and great thoughts! This is romantic and quite special! An enchanting picture you've painted. I could just envision it all Great work! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
WhtDove, Thank you for coming by, and to comment so graciously about this little work of mine. It is one of my most favorite ones that I have done. And I love writing about romance. Thanks again. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Truly impressive, this one is!! I can close my eyes and imagine every line. Exquisite words choices! Great Job Bill! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--What a lovely, romantic poem, tenderly written! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Tennessee Angel, Once again I thank you for your kind words. First written as a short story, and then converted into a poem which became my very favorite. Thanks again Angel. Hello Martie, Thank you for your most gracious comments about this poem. I do appreciate them very much. |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Oh, you are a talented man. Every time I read you work it makes me want to run out and find that kind of love. You constantly remind me that its out there. Thankyou so much for making me beleive~ |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
lovely and sweet. Thanks for that round of smiles. Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Cool Poem !  Gossamerwings ;) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Beth, I'm blushing again with your gracious comments and feelings. Well, that kind of love is out there, hard to find maybe, but it is there. I truly believe that you will find it. beowulf_26, Thank you for your comments, they are very appreciated. Gossermerwings, Thank you for coming by. |
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