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Rain Dance
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Rain Dance |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I trace my fingers on my leg at just the mention of your name enraptured in a gentle trance I breathe your words begin, rain dance... beaded sweat upon my lips, stoking fire's restlessness... tasting sweet desire's beat crack the sky with my release... to rain and rain for forty days--- and drown in sea's relief... smiling in remorselessness-- dancing in the dampened heat... |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very nice work, Serenity. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I trace my fingers on my leg at just the mention of your name enraptured in a gentle trance I breathe your words begin, rain dance... beaded sweat upon my lips, stoking fire's restlessness... tasting sweet desire's beat ============ and drown in sea's relief... smiling in remorselessness-- dancing in the dampened heat =========== *cant breathe* send help *need mouth to mouth resuss* send medic (make it 2 cute ones)  I'll be back when I can control my self OH MAN |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Enjoyed the read. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
very nice, serenity fav ... to rain and rain for forty days--- and drown in sea's relief... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Looks more like a Fire dance!!....here I was thinking that you were sending a cool rain to put out the fire J.M. started with her "Sensual Senyru Collection"....lol I should have known better!! Great work Serenity I think I'll go for "help".....  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*still laughing at "subtle"* LOL now why ya wanna do me like this me twin... show me some mercy baby... ya KNOW what Mardi Gras heat does to me and then me muse leaves... my my my ... well i think i need some raspberry tea after this one... I could sit it on you and BOIL it LOL LOL later-hot-tator-gator me *stomping out of room...cursing muse* LOL OH by the way... did i mention ... I LOVE THIS POEM (like duh!!)  *kiss kiss* |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
I truly, truly loved this piece... I really liked the beginning but then again I loved it all. It's great! Sauni Sauni :) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, ya'll kept sayin' ya wanted me to cheer up...grins to me friends...thank you all kindly. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
The title really took a grab on me and when I began to read.....WELL, it is another HOT night in the forum tonight. Well done and between you and JM posting these beauties I don't think I am going to get any sleep tonite.  |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very Hot Serenity. Don't set too many fires remember we are in a drought here. lol Thankz, Rich |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
serenity, NO STOP THE RAIN DANCE!!! Just when we get fine weather here in Ireland, other than the mention of rain this is a wonderful poem ebautifully expressed. Think you can do the sun dance for me.  why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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