Open Poetry #8 |
Sounds |
Sunshine
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Sounds Soft, gentle harp play quiet, not sharp lullaby me to my sleep wake me gentle from dream deep sway me into a wistful mood do not allow me to brood soft, subtle harp ever so soft, never sharp you are the very reason I cry heaven help me here I sigh… for you were being plucked while on my bridal bed I lay and there, a high note struck and my soul’s mate died that day…. 19 July 2000 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
sunshine, What an ending beyond belief. So sorrowful. Very well done. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sunshine..... This is wonderful......a romantic tragedy, very tender and sad......... ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Bill, Sunny 1, thank you for your kind comments... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, Wherefrom would such a sorrow erupt? I wonder... but a well written poem as always... regards, sudhir. |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
In one word.......... Perfection! I truly enjoyed this treasure of a poem, and the way of it was so soft and haunting almost. Well written! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WoW sunshine I found this so soft and tender and then the ending...such sorrow Awesome poem sweet one Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I really enjoyed the flow and form in this Sunshine ... hauntingly tender ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all so much. "Haunting" was what I was going for...apparently I did this for some of you! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It really did haunt me into coming back for another peek... regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Such tender passion followed ending in pain. This was a wonderful read and I can see why Sudhir came back to it. It does haunt ones soul. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir, Mark, thank you very much for reading and commenting. Perhaps the "moral" behind this is that even in the sweetest of times, loss can be so immediate. Never then hesitate to enjoy what life brings. {~,^} KRJ |
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