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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
That this comes, at a time could not imagine Nor, what I thought would have become. This passion yearns; my soul doth happen To want what future, that I might have one. With this, fair creature of learned intent, That, having watched from afar, And having begun my travel with content Do so, and see my mind wonder. To a place where waters have no tide But move with the grace of the wind, To find a home, where I begin That she may be at my side. But distance becomes our danger foe, My lady, hold my heart so we may go. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Michael G, Your form is good , your imagery compelling , my only critique would be the meter ( de-Dum de-Dum de-Dum de-Dum de-Dum ) I usually count this off on someone elses fingers ( as we moose don't have any ).Good poem . Doc |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Do so, and see my mind wonder. To a place where waters have no tide But move with the grace of the wind, To find a home, where I begin That she may be at my side. But distance becomes our danger foe, My lady, hold my heart so we may go. ============== you already know how i love these lil beauties... i dont know how to write em... dont know about meter and all... but i do so like the emotions expressed lovely Michael later-sonnet-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Michael* This is contains such hope and longing.....a beautiful piece. I, like J.M., don't know a thing about writing these but I enjoyed it very much~ |
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