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Fortress of False
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Fortress of False |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Behind the smile are the tears I weep and the secrets I keep Behind the smile are the lies I’ve told and the regret I hold Behind the laugh are the memories that haunt and the voices that taunt Behind the laugh are the silent screams and the unformed dreams Behind the pale aqua eyes are the horrors I live and the sins I can’t forgive Behind the pale aqua eyes are the years of unrest and this never ending quest Within the fortress of False I will abide and behind these little walls I will hide No one will ask so there’s no reason to tell why I don’t venture from this shell The smile hides the shadows within let the fallacious sunshine begin The laughter distracts from the pain play the melodious tune again Please don’t look deep into my eyes there lies the weakest wall of my disguise It would only hurt for you to know So within the Fortress of False I go |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, You have pierced my heart here. The knife enters and turns so swifty I have to catch my breath. You really got me with this one my friend. Very vivid and realistic writing. Hang in there, WE will get through it. I promise. Take care.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I think too many of us spend way too much time in our fortresses. It's so easy to do, isn't it? Great writing, Butterflies!  Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Behind the laugh are the memories that haunt and the voices that taunt Behind the laugh are the silent screams and the unformed dreams Behind the pale aqua eyes are the horrors I live and the sins I can’t forgive Behind the pale aqua eyes are the years of unrest and this never ending quest Within the fortress of False I will abide and behind these little walls I will hide No one will ask so there’s no reason to tell why I don’t venture from this shell ======================= love will tear down those walls of pain's pride you will be released by those tears you've cried Love will unlock the door...in time you will see... I promise you...butterflies are meant to be free. *************** you touch my heart with this honest, soulfilled poem my SS... you have written it from a depth that can only help heal you.. tho I do know the process is painful... your poetry is showing such strength and self discovery of late... it will only get better... love ya girl jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Behind the pale aqua eyes are the horrors I live and the sins I can’t forgive Behind the pale aqua eyes are the years of unrest and this never ending quest these lines really grabbed me..... you make the reader feel the story could be about them... very good. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
It only takes a little crack to bring that wall down...hang in there never say never |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Behind the pale aqua eyes are the horrors I live and the sins I can’t forgive Behind the pale aqua eyes are the years of unrest and this never ending quest Within the fortress of False I will abide and behind these little walls I will hide No one will ask so there’s no reason to tell why I don’t venture from this shell Your words haunt my very being and I know this fortress all too well. Keep searching for that key and I will meet you outside the walls someday. This is now in my file and I will cherish this piece for many years to come. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Bdc ... IMHO, easily one of your best ... thanks. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
great vivid writing...touches a place where poetry is...must be the heart. Well done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, little Butterfly~ Are those tears I feel ? Behind the fortress walls a butterfly weeps ... Sweet butterfly ... you can fly over the wall. Spread your wings and gently soar. This is one powerfully written poem. You have grown so much ... perhaps metamorphosed is a good word. *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Tis sad to see the butterfly weep and her flight so weak....keep your spirits soaring with hope from within a butterfly soul and gather strength from the souls around you. Love and *HUG* tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
L.W.* Yes we will my friend.......YES we will thank you so much for your kind reply~ Denise* It does become very easy to stay there within the safety of those walls. Thank you so much for reading~ J.M.* A beautiful poetic response, thank you so very much for that. I know you understand thank you for your caring response~ Jamie* I think many can relate to shutting off the pain for those around us and keeping it to ourselves. Thank you for your thoughful response and for reading~ Paula* Wise words, thank you~ Mark* Your comments are always cherished and I'm touched by your response, thank you so very much~ MA* Thank you for your kind comment and for reading~ Martie* Yes I do believe it's the heart.... thank you so much for your kindness~ Marge* That was so beautiful, thank you for the compliment and for reading~ Tracie* ((Hugs))right back at ya! Thank you from the bottom of my heart~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Caressing your soul will come one, Left in your eyes will be tears none, No longer have you to hide behind walls Fortress of False, then breached will fall... don't lose hope my friend, for like Janet says butterflies are meant to be free... so don't cry, dear butterfly... A very well written poem from you...butterflies~ regards and take care, sudhir |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sudhir* Your poetic replies are always cherished. Thank you so much for reading my friend~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
BDC THat both equally beautiful and painful to read. A stunning piece that cut straight through my heart. Sorry for for your pain my friend. Please hang on big hug, take care. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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LiLOnE Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 41Sudbury, Ma |
ButterflysDontCry...  That was a breath takingly beautiful and heart tearing poem.. I love your poems... they are simply wonderfull keep them up!! ~*~LiLOnE~*~ PS: I love your name!!!  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Brian* Thank you much for your kind comments and for reading* Lil* AWE I'm blushin! Thank you from the bottom of my heart! |
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Impassionata Junior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 26Alberta,Canada |
Butterflies....So poignant and exquisite writing! I have felt all that you say here and I feel like we know each other well...absolutely beautiful..Thank you. |
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