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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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I see you know how to put a bottle to your lips and sip that cold dark sweet nectar. I see you know how to light a cigarette and, with it burning, suck in the smoke and needed rush of exhausted pain. I see you know the answer doesn't lie in the sun or the rain. Nothing falling or lit in the sky. I see you know there's no answer at all, it seems. I see you know the beauty of an insect spinning in the light, wings like mirror teardrops pressed to thin plastic and veins. I see you understand that love is just a word caught in flame. I see you know the worst thing to know is the truth: the thing you need to hear the most. I see you've handled many mistakes. Your arms speak in hard lost trails; your eyes blare in their blindness; your mouth and lips form that perfect seal around things, but with that quaver, that little bit of quavering near your lip. Lost in smoke. Look up. I want to see you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I see you know the answer doesn't lie in the sun or the rain. Nothing falling or lit in the sky. I see you know there's no answer at all, it seems. ----------------- I see you understand that love is just a word caught in flame. I see you know the worst thing to know is the truth: the thing you need to hear the most. I see you've handled many mistakes. ----------------- Look up. I want to see you. ---------------- me thinks you do see ... me thinks you have eyes that "see on thru" me thinks you already know i love this one ... (hmmmm) reminds me of someone too (hmmmm) me thinks this one deserves its own butterfly slippers  later cool eyed gator jm/bs  And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh my...this is just---well, suffice to say, I was just about to post a poem--theme being that every perfect thing had been written-and what do I see? This absolutely perfect thing, newly written (?) anyhow...more paper for the fire now, Mike...lol. Truly truly touching... |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
I liked this one alot....makes me think of alot of differnet things.....let me reflect a bit......Nice work...Julie  |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow this one blows me away, you have a way with words with the things that you see ...wow! |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Bsquirrel~ this made me feel sad...... I'm not sure why though.....much too early this morning for me. Loved the read. -SEA |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
sounds of city realms and trailor style, i really like your work, it always hits home in this memory sorta way. kindly, redheart angrybraids |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very insightful poem. Good imagery. Well done! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very well done bsquirrel! I read this a few times, each time somehow interpreting it a little differently, but each time a sigh at the end ... loved that ending! Best wishes, /Kit |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks for all the kind replies, guys (and gals). Mike |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
dweamy dweamy just dweamy (to mainly to call a poem dreamy yuh yuh) |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mike~ Wonderful poem to read Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Walt and Tracie, I'm glad you both enjoyed. Mike |
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