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Time and Sorrow
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Time and Sorrow |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada 
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Looking back at a time where I knew no pain Smiles and innocence were mine And the whole world for my own If I believed it to be All men are created equal I was told this was true I shook hands with many I trusted all But time is efficient as it grinds Slowly forward I hadn't noticed how much had passed Until I found myself looking back Remembering I saw then a child looking ahead Daydreaming of being a man And now a man looking back Longing to be that child once more For with age comes graying as slowly as time itself It takes over your soul Decades of tears wash away the bright hope of youth And the dull pain of past sorrow Resonates in a slowly emptying heart The mistakes that were made The betrayal I've felt The promises broken They all sit unforgotten Unforgiven Some nights I sit alone And cry for the innocence that is lost The smiles that are no longer The whole world that shall never be mine All men are not created equal I've found this to be true I still shake hands with many But the trust is now gone And time grinds on Over pain and over triumph I still don't notice how much has passed Until I find myself looking back Remembering The smiles and innocence That once were mine. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
even though we grow old and jaded, and we long for our youth and innocence..remember that as long as we can remember the happiness we once had...we will always carry a piece of it within us...no matter how disheartened...that tiny shimmer of innocence still glows with in you..all you need to do..is just look. i really felt this poem..and i enjoyed it very much. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oohhh...and ouch...sadness and regret and longing and...oh my...but this is lovely... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But time is efficient as it grinds Slowly forward I hadn't noticed how much had passed Until I found myself looking back Remembering I saw then a child looking ahead Daydreaming of being a man And now a man looking back Longing to be that child once more For with age comes graying as slowly as time itself It takes over your soul Decades of tears wash away the bright hope of youth And the dull pain of past sorrow Resonates in a slowly emptying heart The mistakes that were made The betrayal I've felt The promises broken They all sit unforgotten Unforgiven Some nights I sit alone And cry for the innocence that is lost The smiles that are no longer The whole world that shall never be mine ======================= my goodness.... so much sorrow and regret... but so well written and expressed you have written this with such depth... this is indeed lovely in its losses... excellent work i hope you find healing and strength in your writing take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Trew~ I hope there is much looking ahead in your life ... The eyes of the heart always take a look back ... for I think we need to know where we've been so we can appreciate where we are. 'I saw then a child looking ahead Daydreaming of being a man And now a man looking back Longing to be that child once more' And always ... the child in us longs to come out and play again. Well done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Trew, This one took hold of my heart and squeezed it with a gentle sense of longing. Oh, to go back . . . . but, as they say you can never go back. I think we all take a look back to where we once were when things were fresh and new to us. Sometimes that help us to deal with the pain of where we have ended up. This was excellent writing!! Hoping to catch you soon on icq.  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) This is very powerful writing.....your words echo many of my own feelings. If only when we were young we realized how wonderful that innocent time was......that wisdom only comes with age though~ |
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