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to be saved from the sun...
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to be saved from the sun... |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
and so I've decided to picture life without you millions of days I have spent holding onto something that doesn't bear your name anymore only a picture in my mind played thousands of empty times Do you want to know the truth? I love you that's it. I suppose I have learned a hard lesson from your promises and kisses it appears that something beautiful can be destroyed and can be too far gone to be repaired- me and you only shivering flesh standing on the frozen January ground being covered with snow falling infinitely too fast to be saved from the sun... |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Great poem! The ending was way cool but heartfelt. Sauni Sauni :) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good! I enjoyed this.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Great poem. The sun will break through . . .  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
jennie may, I wondered what I would find when I opened this up...perfection! Very, very good! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful imager in those last lines jennie may...I liked this alot...nice poem. |
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